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9TH Series Roaring Lions Vs Prideful Animals
Intro(dialogue, no singing)
"I just gotta say this
I know I'm not a role model
Let alone a hero
But when I feel your broken inside
Be a Roaring Lion(not a prideful animal)
That's all"
Verse 1
In a country
Full of lies
Deep despair...is within, every young
Generation
What's next(why do you lie)
Chorus
Come up to my face and tell me all of the reasons for
When you walked away(stop with all the lies)
And see the changing seasons(THE EARTH IS BREAKING)
Because of us...
GOD WILLING HE KNOWS MY PAIN AND...
"I just gotta say this
I know I'm not a role model
Let alone a hero
But when I feel your broken inside
Be a Roaring Lion(not a prideful animal)
That's all"
Verse 1
In a country
Full of lies
Deep despair...is within, every young
Generation
What's next(why do you lie)
Chorus
Come up to my face and tell me all of the reasons for
When you walked away(stop with all the lies)
And see the changing seasons(THE EARTH IS BREAKING)
Because of us...
GOD WILLING HE KNOWS MY PAIN AND...
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Willow Creek
Willow Creek
Chorus:
Gonna take the midnight train to Willow Creek
In a pair of faded jeans with boots on my feet
Buy a little vacant home in the middle of the street
And start a brand new life
Verse 1:
I’m just a man of twenty five
With a brand new guitar
And a plan to hit the stage
And go real far
Sing a real fine ditty
To a gal who looks pretty
And become a superstar
Chorus:
Gonna take the midnight train to Willow Creek
In a pair of faded jeans with boots on my feet
Buy a little vacant home in the middle of...
Chorus:
Gonna take the midnight train to Willow Creek
In a pair of faded jeans with boots on my feet
Buy a little vacant home in the middle of the street
And start a brand new life
Verse 1:
I’m just a man of twenty five
With a brand new guitar
And a plan to hit the stage
And go real far
Sing a real fine ditty
To a gal who looks pretty
And become a superstar
Chorus:
Gonna take the midnight train to Willow Creek
In a pair of faded jeans with boots on my feet
Buy a little vacant home in the middle of...
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-34. 2 Girls, 1Boy(The Incense House)
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Garbage Humor
Poison tethers us together and nestles us under feathered wings.
A toxic tribe of toxic people keeping no promises to our king.
A sick, sad older man with a last name that can't be pronounced
Is dying and he will be dead before night comes, and we're all laughing about it.
But tucked underneath the leaves, there's a hidden antidote.
Sparking conflict between the artist and the walls.
The paint is not what it seems, we have been right here before.
Suffering on, letting God tell me what is real and what is not.
Atlantis seemed too happy then, so we sank their...
A toxic tribe of toxic people keeping no promises to our king.
A sick, sad older man with a last name that can't be pronounced
Is dying and he will be dead before night comes, and we're all laughing about it.
But tucked underneath the leaves, there's a hidden antidote.
Sparking conflict between the artist and the walls.
The paint is not what it seems, we have been right here before.
Suffering on, letting God tell me what is real and what is not.
Atlantis seemed too happy then, so we sank their...
52 reads
2 Comments
8th Deities Civil Wars
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8th Midnight Crush, Future Skies
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And the Serpent Said, "Dusta!"
Beheaded, they walk;
Corrupted, they talk.
Their faces concealed,
Their wounds always heal.
What's it feel like to be an empty shell?
Does it feel right? I hope it feels like hell.
Deception; believe.
Inspire; conceive.
When everything's wrong;
The weakness, too strong.
So what's it feel like when the tables turn?
Does it feel right? I hope it's torture.
Liar, liar, think you're saved?
Liar, liar, dig your grave
Nowhere to run (run now, run far)
Nowhere to hide, turn around.
Beheaded, they walk;...
Corrupted, they talk.
Their faces concealed,
Their wounds always heal.
What's it feel like to be an empty shell?
Does it feel right? I hope it feels like hell.
Deception; believe.
Inspire; conceive.
When everything's wrong;
The weakness, too strong.
So what's it feel like when the tables turn?
Does it feel right? I hope it's torture.
Liar, liar, think you're saved?
Liar, liar, dig your grave
Nowhere to run (run now, run far)
Nowhere to hide, turn around.
Beheaded, they walk;...
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Open Up Your Heart
You and i
We're like pieces of puzzle that just can't come together
You and only you
Make me feel like never before
All i know is that this feeling won't go away anytime soon
Am i the only one
Who thinks we could be something so perfect and beautiful
Just like you are to me
Why don't you hear my heart
That screams when you are next to me
There is this place i know
So cold and so far away
I hope that someday
Oh someday you'll see right through my heart
And that place won't be so cold anymore
The puzzle that just...
We're like pieces of puzzle that just can't come together
You and only you
Make me feel like never before
All i know is that this feeling won't go away anytime soon
Am i the only one
Who thinks we could be something so perfect and beautiful
Just like you are to me
Why don't you hear my heart
That screams when you are next to me
There is this place i know
So cold and so far away
I hope that someday
Oh someday you'll see right through my heart
And that place won't be so cold anymore
The puzzle that just...
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Things I Would Say To You If Only Life Was A Movie
I've got so much to tell you
About the things i went through
Since everything changed between us
But i don't want to let you in
Just take all the blame over your head
I am far in need
For someone to make me believe it will all be fine
Hold me just for tonight
I don't know why we are so far away on different roads
Swear to me you don't miss me
And this doesn't break you down
All those nine years spent together
They have gone down the drain
Was it all just vain?
Sometimes i wonder if we were just wasting away our young years
...
About the things i went through
Since everything changed between us
But i don't want to let you in
Just take all the blame over your head
I am far in need
For someone to make me believe it will all be fine
Hold me just for tonight
I don't know why we are so far away on different roads
Swear to me you don't miss me
And this doesn't break you down
All those nine years spent together
They have gone down the drain
Was it all just vain?
Sometimes i wonder if we were just wasting away our young years
...
39 reads
2 Comments
8th Meanings Of Bones Clashing Against Flesh
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8th From Holocausts and Plagues (External and Internal Scars Never Fade)
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No Borders
I Arrived into this world already an outsider,
My reflection a constant reminder,
Sorry I tend to get emotional,
when I feel these emotions pull,
But sometimes we just follow where the motion go,
Reached rock bottom at ocean floor,
I swear we are too considered with what happens on tv screens,
and I swear that we make all these ugly scenes,
Take those masks off,
In one way another we already had it rough,
but we make these walls separating each other,
when we need each other the most,
We put more value to simple things,
when war is at our...
My reflection a constant reminder,
Sorry I tend to get emotional,
when I feel these emotions pull,
But sometimes we just follow where the motion go,
Reached rock bottom at ocean floor,
I swear we are too considered with what happens on tv screens,
and I swear that we make all these ugly scenes,
Take those masks off,
In one way another we already had it rough,
but we make these walls separating each other,
when we need each other the most,
We put more value to simple things,
when war is at our...
27 reads
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