Last Hand

cheers Jack, I see your point 'bout the last three lines.

I'll take out the 'hearts'  and see how it reads then, and more than likely end up taking out the other two.

thank's for dropping in man.

God..I hope you're right Strider, else somebody's got a lot of explaining to do.



Thanks for dropping by and leaving your thoughts, man.

All in!! I like that.. But sucks when you lose the entire stack :-) nice poem xoxo

ahh, Gigi. 'it's the nature of the beast' 'speculate to accumulate'  and countless other cliches that I could throw out there that mean the same thing.

appreciate your stopping by missus, thanks for your thoughts.  

Magdalena

It's the times that we win that are most memorable, sure, when we lose we'll just scrunch the docket up and throw it on the floor, but when we win ..

all in is exactly how it should be, if only because you say so.

I do believe Wales slaughtered the English and retained the cup. see? funny how you remember the wins.


thank you for dropping by and leaving your thoughts.  

Mikki

Far too kind missus, all true though as per.

appreciate your presence, thanks lots for your thoughts.  

Jesta me ol' flower.

ahh, isn't that the way it is. if you were a poet your life would be more complicated than Fermat's conjecture right now.

I'm glad you get the snippet, and the poem in general. A quick write sometimes, takes a lot of the complication away.

anyhow, happy to see you here Jesta, thanks for the drop by and leaving your footprint.


  

I like this idea, love is a huge gamble,  and you got play at least once ..win or lose :)

Hey Nikkimoe

yeah, you're right, and I s'pose with what's on offer it makes the gamble all that much more bearable wouldn't you say.  


really happy to see you here Nikkimoe, Thanks for stopping by and leaving your brain print :)

nice
gaming
gambol

write on  on  on

Daniel

Game on, thanks for stopping by my humble scribe-ings  man, appreciate it.

craic, been over this a few times.
honestly, I am a little confused about how I feel about the end there. My first instinct is that it works, that its a playful ending to a comfortable personality... for some reason I second guess this and am somewhat critical just in that it really is so cliché, and don't get me wrong its a cliché I love and use often, but I am not sure I am convinced of how it feels to go "all in" here in this write...blah blah blah, why not throw that out for the sake of conversation right?...anywho, dug it man

LB

Yeah,  I hear you man,  think you're not wrong about the ending,  certainly confused is a step of from full blown 'too corny' which the first ending was.  I think sometimes I might rush an end. I have thought  about rewriting the ending altogether, but so far I haven't come up with anything that fits. I'll play around with it for a bit and see if I can origonil-ize it a little.

Happy to have your thoughts LB, and appreciate your dropping by and th lengths you went to to explain your position.
Thanks for that, man

Craic, I dig the analogy of love being like a game of poker which is fertile subject matter rife with possibilities. Gambling, cheating, winning, losing, etc. My two cents on the ending is that while it works for me, maybe jazz up the phrase, "I play love" with some showing as you did in the first stanza where you had the " long legs in tight jeans or short shorts
watching red sunsets" imagery. All in all, though,  I did like the piece. Nice job!

Tony,

you know, I've been thinking just that myself. I think maybe I'll put another couple of lines in and jazz that stanza up a small bit.

delighted to have your thoughts here Tony, Thanks lots.

Eamonn,

Was it intentional that this section

"of long legs in tight jeans or short shorts
watching red sunsets,
and "let's see just how much sweat
we can work up".."

shoots you out of the poker house of the narrator's mind, so to speak ?

That is exactly what it did for me. I found it an interesting aspect of the piece actually, and  rather effective for such a short poem.

Enjoyed reading this :)

Maggie,

Truth is, I was trying to lead into the poker house gently from the start, which I saw as a kind of proclamation or declaration if you will, "this is the way it is" which culminated in the 'all in' at the end.

I thank you for dropping by and leaving your thoughts, good to see you.  

a hand of fertile seeds spread wide on moistured ground .... well done sir  

Harlequin

good to see you man. I like that little line.

than's for the visit and thoughts, man

DD , is this a ghost I see before me?

ain't that the truth.

good to see you drop by and leave your thoughts, thanks

Al,

What can one say in responce to such a comment other than thank you.
I'd break out the champers if I had some handy, bottle of cool Bud'll have to do.

Delighted to.have bumped you Al,  shine da fk on  

ahh, that my friend,is one way of looking at it :)

thanks for dropping by Carpe

I was upset not to see anything new from you :-( xoxo

So.sorry to disapoint missus :).

This is a good read. I agree that the last is kinda corny but other then that is was good

Why thank you kindly Miss Ambur ,

JaimeBun,

happy to have touched you, regardless of how oddly ;)

thank you kindly for dropping by and leaving your thought print

all in

nice job

Miss Deborah,

Thank you for the drop by and words kind Lady

enjoyed

ahhh, a lady of few words ..an odd trait for your gender

happy that you enjoyed.

Thanks for dropping by myeverywish, and for leaving your word of encouragement :)

Cos I play love the way I bet chips
on that last hand of poker


all in.

oh goodness i need a towel.. this visual just sent something down there that needs tending too,... bows sir..

Devil woman

Always happy to make you gush,  thanks  for the visit and words , please cum again