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Töte mich, bevour ich mich umbringen
blood pools in black swamps
eating like the venom in my veins
killing the thoughts in my mind
forgetting the dire conscious
with my blades I please the demon
he monoplilizes my desires
the posion threatens my sanity
as I make the final call
when I begin to hurt, I find myself
with illusions of everlasting sleep
it is so peaceful in my brain
with screams of violent agony
racing in through my silent tears
no one hears me when I wail
kill me before I kill myself
Published 3rd Mar 2013
| Edited 29th Mar 2013
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7th Mar 2013 2:20pm
Hi! Welcome to DU!! Hope you like it here, pretty much everyone is friendly! but... Very deep meaningful poem. I like it alot, seems like your talking about cutting? I have a close relationship with that when i was younger. But im clean now :) Cant wait to read the rest and then some!
8th Mar 2013 8:26pm
hallo! :) thanks for welcoming me, im glad you liked it. yes, it is about cutting. it was one of my first poems and i no longer cut. but i liked it and it was abstracty~
13th Mar 2013 1:39am
You need to capitalize a few "I".
but I feel this poem tells me a lot about your writing style and about yourself. I hope you find good friends here, and welcome to our home of poetry.
but I feel this poem tells me a lot about your writing style and about yourself. I hope you find good friends here, and welcome to our home of poetry.
13th Mar 2013 10:38pm
capitalize a few i's okay!
thanks for commenting, reading, and welcoming me!! :)
thanks for commenting, reading, and welcoming me!! :)
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19th Mar 2013 2:14am
you poured a bucket full of sorrow into this, & stirred in a cry for mercy. it's a good poem...
19th Mar 2013 2:58am