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Gasoline Skies
Gasoline skies contemplate suicide,
heaving out cigarette smoke figures
which fight the battles he never could.
Thinking in his matchstick castle,
formed by waning silvery wisps of
shooting star trails,
the first decision is made.
Helios slumps beside him,
vacantly hunting truth with
all intentions of man slaughter.
The sun sank into depression;
shipwrecked with muted gold ruins,
extinguished by guilt.
Mourning pulls a few strings,
and a decision is made.
A sun regenerated unfurls itself
over the expanse of long-gone blue.
A lightning bolt from the heavens,
nurtures steadily growing wildfire.
Helios fuses into the flames,
they welcome him home with
blistering excitement flickering.
A new beginning has ignited.
heaving out cigarette smoke figures
which fight the battles he never could.
Thinking in his matchstick castle,
formed by waning silvery wisps of
shooting star trails,
the first decision is made.
Helios slumps beside him,
vacantly hunting truth with
all intentions of man slaughter.
The sun sank into depression;
shipwrecked with muted gold ruins,
extinguished by guilt.
Mourning pulls a few strings,
and a decision is made.
A sun regenerated unfurls itself
over the expanse of long-gone blue.
A lightning bolt from the heavens,
nurtures steadily growing wildfire.
Helios fuses into the flames,
they welcome him home with
blistering excitement flickering.
A new beginning has ignited.
Published 28th Feb 2013
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28th Feb 2013 9:34pm
28th Feb 2013 9:37pm
Ahh, I had a good feeling about this one.
I do like fire :)
Thank you for your comments :)
I do like fire :)
Thank you for your comments :)
Anonymous
28th Feb 2013 9:36pm
"heaving out cigarette smoke figures", and "The sun sank into depression;
shipwrecked with muted gold ruins,
extinguished by guilt." <---those lines are Amazing!
Where does your mind go when your pen takes control?? I want to visit there sometimes soon!:)
shipwrecked with muted gold ruins,
extinguished by guilt." <---those lines are Amazing!
Where does your mind go when your pen takes control?? I want to visit there sometimes soon!:)
I can type quicker than I can write,
so my mental pen takes control.
I would love to know where it goes too :)
Thank you for your comment :)
so my mental pen takes control.
I would love to know where it goes too :)
Thank you for your comment :)
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 00:09am
28th Feb 2013 10:32pm
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1st Mar 2013 1:28am
I have read this 3 times and every time I'm like wow, your words are deep and your imagery is a dark circus of awesomeness :)
well done
well done
1st Mar 2013 6:18am
1st Mar 2013 1:46am
1st Mar 2013 6:19am
Anonymous
- Edited 12th Jul 2018 3:39am
1st Mar 2013 2:25am
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1st Mar 2013 6:20am
1st Mar 2013 5:02am
"Gasoline skies contemplate suicide,
heaving out cigarette smoke figures
which fight the battles he never could." <-- For me, these lines really bring out this sense of the things so many of us do to try and mute the pains in our mind. And,
"Mourning pulls a few strings,
and a decision is made." really shows the impact deep, difficult emotions can have on a person.
It actually reminds me of something I've recently gone through: a brother of a friend of mine (21yrs old) passed away last week, and it really does causes decisions to be made in our head...
Not sure if my response is your intended reaction, but the poem was thought provoking. And I enjoyed it very much :) You're images worked well. Especially the "ship wreaked sun".
heaving out cigarette smoke figures
which fight the battles he never could." <-- For me, these lines really bring out this sense of the things so many of us do to try and mute the pains in our mind. And,
"Mourning pulls a few strings,
and a decision is made." really shows the impact deep, difficult emotions can have on a person.
It actually reminds me of something I've recently gone through: a brother of a friend of mine (21yrs old) passed away last week, and it really does causes decisions to be made in our head...
Not sure if my response is your intended reaction, but the poem was thought provoking. And I enjoyed it very much :) You're images worked well. Especially the "ship wreaked sun".
1st Mar 2013 6:23am
Thank you for your perceptive comment!
You can interpret it any way you wish to,
but I was definitely focused along those lines :)
You can interpret it any way you wish to,
but I was definitely focused along those lines :)
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 9:39pm
1st Mar 2013 8:55am
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Anonymous
- Edited 11th Jun 2019 9:40pm
1st Mar 2013 2:32pm
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1st Mar 2013 3:30pm
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 1:38pm
2nd Mar 2013 00:01am
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2nd Mar 2013 5:53am
2nd Mar 2013 3:10pm
Great! The feeling in it somewhat reminds me of this old poem of mine. Hope you don't mind I post the link.
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/55140-mad-with-sunlight/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/55140-mad-with-sunlight/
2nd Mar 2013 3:19pm
Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 7:37pm
11th Apr 2013 2:11pm
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11th Apr 2013 2:55pm
You got that entirely right, that was
an aspect of what I was aiming for;
though your Confucius quotes are wonderful :D
an aspect of what I was aiming for;
though your Confucius quotes are wonderful :D
12th Apr 2013 4:56pm
12th Apr 2013 5:10pm