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oh what a tangled web
You lie like a rug... Then brush it off with a shrug... I must admit you have charm... But fail to realize your words do harm... Spreading it on, thick as butter... So damn callous it make me shutter... I see you will say whatever you think I want to hear... Now come a lil closer, let me put a bug in your ear... I been hip to your game from the first day we met... I know you will say damn near anything, just to get your dick wet... Aint no wool over my eyes and even a blind man can see... That your more interested in a cheap thrill, than truly getting to know me... Yet I entertain you in fact I find it down right funny... That you think you fooling me and im laughing at you honey!
Published 2nd Sep 2010
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2nd Sep 2010 00:45am
first line pulled me in, caught my interest, I like your form, the way you write in long lines with ellipses, suits the theme and gives a stream of consciousness feel, I think this is funny and I like it as it is, but some of the rhyming is slightly off but I'd say it works...
