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Temptation
[i]Reach for me now, let me see the desire
gaze into these eyes, brimming with fire
kiss me with passion to tingle my spine
your tongue softly tastes me, sweet scent of wine
Kisses like raindrops, fall on neck and on shoulders
embers ignited, this deep fire yet smolders
wandering fingertips grazing my skin
give me those words and the true flames begin
Cleave to me closely, I need feel that desire
show me you want me, my passion climbs higher
fingertip's pathways now followed by lips
a slow undulation of traitorous hips
Oh, scorch my ears whilst you stroke of my flesh
let me hear your desire, your fulfillment; my quest
undress me with fever, yet leave me in lace
the glint of the devil on this angel's face[/i]
gaze into these eyes, brimming with fire
kiss me with passion to tingle my spine
your tongue softly tastes me, sweet scent of wine
Kisses like raindrops, fall on neck and on shoulders
embers ignited, this deep fire yet smolders
wandering fingertips grazing my skin
give me those words and the true flames begin
Cleave to me closely, I need feel that desire
show me you want me, my passion climbs higher
fingertip's pathways now followed by lips
a slow undulation of traitorous hips
Oh, scorch my ears whilst you stroke of my flesh
let me hear your desire, your fulfillment; my quest
undress me with fever, yet leave me in lace
the glint of the devil on this angel's face[/i]
Published 21st Feb 2013
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21st Feb 2013 4:16am
Wonderful poem its just quatrain 2 needs some editing other then that i like it
21st Feb 2013 4:42am
Thanks for your comment. I'd be interested to hear your suggestions for the second stanza.
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 7:38pm
21st Feb 2013 4:30am
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21st Feb 2013 4:43am
thanks mememe. I'm kind of partial to that last line myself, but then again, I'm biased! ;)
Anonymous
- Edited 26th Jun 2018 9:39pm
21st Feb 2013 5:40am
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21st Feb 2013 12:01pm
21st Feb 2013 5:50am
21st Feb 2013 12:04pm
With a wink and a mischievious smile, I shall turn my eyes away and refrain from answering. ;)
I'm glad you liked it! thank you!
Lola
I'm glad you liked it! thank you!
Lola
Anonymous
- Edited 14th Nov 2018 6:35pm
21st Feb 2013 2:50pm
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21st Feb 2013 9:15pm
21st Feb 2013 6:08pm
21st Feb 2013 9:15pm
Anonymous
22nd Feb 2013 3:37am
"Reach for me now, let me see the desire
gaze into these eyes, brimming with fire
kiss me with passion to tingle my spine
your tongue softly tastes me, sweet scent of wine"<----you hooked me with that beautifully sexy stanza and kept my attention through-out!
Such a sensual Pen!
Welcome to DU!xo
gaze into these eyes, brimming with fire
kiss me with passion to tingle my spine
your tongue softly tastes me, sweet scent of wine"<----you hooked me with that beautifully sexy stanza and kept my attention through-out!
Such a sensual Pen!
Welcome to DU!xo
22nd Feb 2013 3:48am
thanks for the warm welcome. I had one the first day I got here too. someone pissed all over me! LMAO!
Glad to meet you Rain! thanks for dropping on by!
Lola
Glad to meet you Rain! thanks for dropping on by!
Lola
22nd Feb 2013 4:46am
22nd Feb 2013 4:50am
I'm glad. I encourage fun! thanks for dropping in and leaving a line. nice to meet you!
23rd Feb 2013 7:45pm
Like the top-down progression of the erotic narrative from the eyes to the hips.
23rd Feb 2013 9:00pm
Ah, but I take it back upstairs in the final stanza to the real errogenous zone. ;)
I like that you're thinking.....
Lola
I like that you're thinking.....
Lola
28th Jun 2013 5:05am