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Luminosity masquerade.
Daybreak glides into place
with a ceramic clink,
indicating for prehistoric
cogs to rotate.
Black is swept away with
impatient tides of blue,
forced into practiced hiding.
She dissipates into colour,
infusing my vision bleak.
White coat strangers
insist on their help
with pristine kindness.
Attempting to wash away
the doleful with dove
waxen walls.
Though as Black swoops raven
into her allotted place,
luminosity slips a homemade
mask over my eyes.
I whirl the bleakness away,
dancing with countless other
starlit veiled prisoners.
A midnight masquerade.
with a ceramic clink,
indicating for prehistoric
cogs to rotate.
Black is swept away with
impatient tides of blue,
forced into practiced hiding.
She dissipates into colour,
infusing my vision bleak.
White coat strangers
insist on their help
with pristine kindness.
Attempting to wash away
the doleful with dove
waxen walls.
Though as Black swoops raven
into her allotted place,
luminosity slips a homemade
mask over my eyes.
I whirl the bleakness away,
dancing with countless other
starlit veiled prisoners.
A midnight masquerade.
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Re: Luminosity masquerade.
19th Feb 2013 9:05pm
I like this, it had this whole steampunk feel to it, I pictured a lot of gears and clock guts in an old antique like hospital and everyone has on a doctors mask...
your words paint the best pictures ever!
Awesome write Scribbler
your words paint the best pictures ever!
Awesome write Scribbler
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re: Re: Luminosity masquerade.
19th Feb 2013 9:08pm
Anonymous
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19th Feb 2013 9:12pm
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re: Re: Luminosity masquerade.
19th Feb 2013 9:18pm
I'm glad you liked the poem *Smiles*.
Thank you for all of your wonderful
comments, much appreciated :)
Thank you for all of your wonderful
comments, much appreciated :)
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 9:39pm
19th Feb 2013 9:18pm
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re: Re: Luminosity masquerade.
19th Feb 2013 9:20pm
Go British! I was drinking tea whilst penning
so that may have influenced the roots showing
themselves.
Thank you for all of your insightful comments :)
so that may have influenced the roots showing
themselves.
Thank you for all of your insightful comments :)
Re: Luminosity masquerade.
19th Feb 2013 11:16pm
Drinking tea, mixed with what else. haha Jk
Beautifully written with great expression:)
Beautifully written with great expression:)
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re: Re: Luminosity masquerade.
20th Feb 2013 6:29am
Re: Luminosity masquerade.
20th Feb 2013 4:16am
I really like the feeling in this one and the images it evokes. I also reminds of a personal memory. All in all great stuff.
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re: Re: Luminosity masquerade.
20th Feb 2013 6:30am
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20th Feb 2013 9:08am
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re: Re: Luminosity masquerade.
24th Feb 2013 9:14pm
Re: Luminosity masquerade.
25th Feb 2013 9:23pm
Powerfully visual, your poem opens eyes as well as doors behind which almost no one knows. Really good reading, my friend.
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re: Re: Luminosity masquerade.
25th Feb 2013 9:25pm