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Vanish
in the vastness of our lives
we were just a moment in time
like a shooting star with a fleeting twinkle
a drop of rain on a scalding pavement
or a flashing thought lost on the tongue
but in that perishing second
you were my eternity
we were just a moment in time
like a shooting star with a fleeting twinkle
a drop of rain on a scalding pavement
or a flashing thought lost on the tongue
but in that perishing second
you were my eternity
Published 6th Feb 2013
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6th Feb 2013 6:28am
Welcome back sis xoxo
This is great. But I think all the "a" at the beginning sounds off. Otherwise it's great really. Love the meaning in it
This is great. But I think all the "a" at the beginning sounds off. Otherwise it's great really. Love the meaning in it
6th Feb 2013 6:37am
Thank you, I am glad to be back. I have a lot of catching up to do.
I changed it slightly, I hope it sounds better.
Thanks for the feedback!
xoxo
I changed it slightly, I hope it sounds better.
Thanks for the feedback!
xoxo
6th Feb 2013 6:38am
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- Edited 14th Nov 2018 6:35pm
6th Feb 2013 8:15am
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6th Feb 2013 2:12pm
Thank you so much Magdalena. I am glad to be back and to be reading yours and others work again.
Thanks so much for your support.
Thanks so much for your support.
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- Edited 16th May 2018 10:05pm
6th Feb 2013 9:34am
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6th Feb 2013 2:12pm
10th Feb 2013 2:29pm
We create memories through choices we make. The sweet ones hopefully outweigh the not so good.
10th Feb 2013 5:01pm
Even if they don't, those are the memories we must focus on the most.
Thanks for stopping by Ken. :)
Thanks for stopping by Ken. :)