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Ela
you're making me hungry
when you talk of bodies.
a desire to cut through the skin
to force it to speak
through metaphors.
when you talk of bodies.
a desire to cut through the skin
to force it to speak
through metaphors.
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Re: Ela
26th Jan 2013 10:22pm
Pretty dark stuff Opheliac, nice going.
ok, if it were mine , I'd probably have gone a slightly different way:
you're making me hungry
with your talk of bodies
giving me
a desire to cut into the skin
and force it to speak
through metaphors
see, it says the same thing in a slightly different way , by no means better though , just different.
as always, enjoyed your writing.
shine on
ok, if it were mine , I'd probably have gone a slightly different way:
you're making me hungry
with your talk of bodies
giving me
a desire to cut into the skin
and force it to speak
through metaphors
see, it says the same thing in a slightly different way , by no means better though , just different.
as always, enjoyed your writing.
shine on
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re: Re: Ela
27th Jan 2013 00:41am
i like your version best to be honest. it's more eloquent than mine.
thank you for your time and comment!
thank you for your time and comment!
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re: Re: Ela
4th Feb 2013 6:35pm
Uma, you're being too kind to my poems. Since you're being such a sweetheart i'll give you something to look up if you like: try 18th century anatomy and dissection. (that was my trigger)
Re: Ela
17th Feb 2013 8:00pm
Re: Ela
23rd Feb 2013 8:57pm
we readers find many facets in your small gem. the dark romance of my spirit defines the slicing into unassuming flesh as a quest to release inner passion...
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re: Re: Ela
9th Apr 2013 1:09pm
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