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HELP
Help me from this nightmare world help me from this pain
help me please to erase everything.
I know i am not worth so much in this world i live but i cling to you, you know its true help me from this pain.
Help me i have fallen in to the depts of despare help me befor i am gone befor i dissaper. i have fallen in to a world filled with nothing but abuse. my body's numb my mind is gone all because of this abuse.
Help me please anyone save me from this angony this numbing pain this horrible game please some one save me.
i know i am dumb i know no one can save me from this pain i know deep in side that i am nothing more then a thing to be used.
Help me please befor i am gone befor the blood spills all i ask is for you to take me back and with your own will slit my throat so it spills every drop i have. to kill me in any way you chose i am nothing more then a thing to be abused. i ask for help i know i am in hell but thats all i want from you to save a girl who is stuck in hell is all that i can do.
help me please can anyone hear me i beg of you just to set me free !
help me please to erase everything.
I know i am not worth so much in this world i live but i cling to you, you know its true help me from this pain.
Help me i have fallen in to the depts of despare help me befor i am gone befor i dissaper. i have fallen in to a world filled with nothing but abuse. my body's numb my mind is gone all because of this abuse.
Help me please anyone save me from this angony this numbing pain this horrible game please some one save me.
i know i am dumb i know no one can save me from this pain i know deep in side that i am nothing more then a thing to be used.
Help me please befor i am gone befor the blood spills all i ask is for you to take me back and with your own will slit my throat so it spills every drop i have. to kill me in any way you chose i am nothing more then a thing to be abused. i ask for help i know i am in hell but thats all i want from you to save a girl who is stuck in hell is all that i can do.
help me please can anyone hear me i beg of you just to set me free !
Published 24th Jan 2013
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26th Jan 2013 5:19am
Wow...this has to be one of the darkest pieces I have read...excellent work on expressing yourself.
26th Jan 2013 9:02am
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26th Jan 2013 9:16am
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26th Jan 2013 9:27am
Alright Tamaura.. the problem I have here is the cliche after cliche.. no real structure or direction. It's honest though, and honesty goes far where I come from. Remember to have an aim, try and mask how you feel in metaphors and bring the reader around and knock them out with a stellar ending.
Keep writing though, you'll only get better.
Keep writing though, you'll only get better.
26th Jan 2013 11:32am
thank you so much for letting me know what is wrong with it i will try hearder next time to wright something better
24th Mar 2013 10:34am
Hello Tamaura and a belated welcome to DUP. I just hopped here from Mourning Cloak's sublime write dedicated to you. I have always been a fan of his work and know you must be really special for him to dedicate something to you.
Being quite ancient I couldn'r help but respond to 'Help' and found it deep and sad.
However as Evan said honesty is all, because it is the first step in facing and changing the reality that we live in.
Being quite ancient I couldn'r help but respond to 'Help' and found it deep and sad.
However as Evan said honesty is all, because it is the first step in facing and changing the reality that we live in.