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Maneuvers
Diligence on the
roads is paramount.
squealing tires on green light
undertaking slower drivers
floating onto a bigger road
Be ready for
anything.
changing lanes through a junction
weaving in and out, at speed
zipping through fast-track at the tolls
Stay alert
and focus.
accelerating past an amber light
passing a squad car at speed
overtaking on a curve
Dangers abound,
and that was just me
on maneuvers.
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Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 9:39pm
9th Jan 2013 5:58pm
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- Edited 16th May 2018 10:05pm
9th Jan 2013 6:31pm
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Re: Maneuvers
9th Jan 2013 6:45pm
I've been waiting for a new piece from you, and as ever I'm not dissapointed! I've tried to write one about driving and it was crap lol makes me appreciate how good this is :)
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9th Jan 2013 6:54pm
Aww, thanks, Dystopian, lovely feedback.
*beams at you*
This one has been brewing for weeks... I finally let it breathe today.
*beams at you*
This one has been brewing for weeks... I finally let it breathe today.
Anonymous
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9th Jan 2013 7:05pm
Wonderfully maneuvered, had images playing like a film clip all the way through this.
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Anonymous
10th Jan 2013 9:13am
Very, very nice Atakti,
Rolling imagery with a strong undercurrent.
Rolling imagery with a strong undercurrent.
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- Edited 15th May 2018 11:36pm
10th Jan 2013 9:18am
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10th Jan 2013 1:41pm
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10th Jan 2013 3:18pm
Speeding ticket, huh? You obviously weren't going fast enough if they caught up with you...
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