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Blade
As he stole her away
Unprepared and unwanted his grip too tight
She would scream
She had it planned out
Though her silence like his hand was warm in its touch
Not the cold in its meaning
He did'nt seem bothered
As the blade sliced her neck
She would scream
She had it planned out
As he stole her away
Her silence remained
Unprepared and unwanted his grip too tight
She would scream
She had it planned out
Though her silence like his hand was warm in its touch
Not the cold in its meaning
He did'nt seem bothered
As the blade sliced her neck
She would scream
She had it planned out
As he stole her away
Her silence remained
Published 2nd Jan 2013
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2nd Jan 2013 2:00pm
2nd Jan 2013 2:29pm
2nd Jan 2013 6:53pm
Disturbingly{?? (lol)}, deliciously dark! Your word choice creates vivid imagery--sensual, sinister, psychotic.
Layered meanings in this poem....victim fearing her loss of life(planning on screaming)--that is, until she actually feels herself in the arms of her personal "Reaper" and experiences the same pleasurable, physical, and emotional release as her murderer. INTENSE !!
Thank you for posting. Please continue sharing your dark creativity-- Like the threads that weave our terrifying nitemares!!!
Lurking within Shadows,
Dark Enchantress
Layered meanings in this poem....victim fearing her loss of life(planning on screaming)--that is, until she actually feels herself in the arms of her personal "Reaper" and experiences the same pleasurable, physical, and emotional release as her murderer. INTENSE !!
Thank you for posting. Please continue sharing your dark creativity-- Like the threads that weave our terrifying nitemares!!!
Lurking within Shadows,
Dark Enchantress
2nd Jan 2013 7:27pm
Why thanks xD
I must step over to the dark side more often
And yes spot on in you're summing up
It's exactly how i wanted to portray it
I must step over to the dark side more often
And yes spot on in you're summing up
It's exactly how i wanted to portray it
2nd Jan 2013 7:38pm
My pleasure!
As the saying goes....
Come to the dark side,
We have cookies! (LOL)
Seriously, your talent for portraying the more "twisted" themes is one that is intriguing.
Enchantress
As the saying goes....
Come to the dark side,
We have cookies! (LOL)
Seriously, your talent for portraying the more "twisted" themes is one that is intriguing.
Enchantress
2nd Jan 2013 7:55pm
Why thank you again me'lady xD
I like to write from a slightly different angle
Dare i say outside of the box
But to be fair for every "different" one i do i create about four crappy ones
Im no great wordsmith
I've done some good ones though
The next ive done but done two today so have to wait and hr to upload
Not twisted but erotica from a slightly diff angle
Lol thats sounds kinda sordid on its own. Haha
I like to write from a slightly different angle
Dare i say outside of the box
But to be fair for every "different" one i do i create about four crappy ones
Im no great wordsmith
I've done some good ones though
The next ive done but done two today so have to wait and hr to upload
Not twisted but erotica from a slightly diff angle
Lol thats sounds kinda sordid on its own. Haha