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"your such a good girl"
As I was
being fucked
he
started to slobber
with thoughts of
his daughter
then
exhaled
"your such a good girl!"
the look on his face
was
almost poetic
in love with the taste
a
lethal synthetic..
yet
i'm only selling
a dream.
I need to get high
so I
cover my eyes
then whisper
"is this how you want it?"
my performance is priceless
with filthy devices
that
brings him
to his knees
he finally cums
and i'm
viciously numb
for the sum
of just
a few dollars
and I
can't wait
to call
the dope man
being fucked
he
started to slobber
with thoughts of
his daughter
then
exhaled
"your such a good girl!"
the look on his face
was
almost poetic
in love with the taste
a
lethal synthetic..
yet
i'm only selling
a dream.
I need to get high
so I
cover my eyes
then whisper
"is this how you want it?"
my performance is priceless
with filthy devices
that
brings him
to his knees
he finally cums
and i'm
viciously numb
for the sum
of just
a few dollars
and I
can't wait
to call
the dope man
Published 9th Dec 2012
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Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 11:36pm
9th Dec 2012 8:41am
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9th Dec 2012 8:41am
9th Dec 2012 12:32pm
9th Dec 2012 5:21pm
Brutal slice of exactly what time it is. Photographic realism. I want to see further into the mind of the character, not because you have not done a complete work but rather because the character is becoming more real.
my performance is priceless
i'm
viciously numb
The lower case "i" is perfect..it is insightful and hinting at further study and depth...ironically, numb and communicating, here in this poem. It is written in first person, so it is narrative and therefore voyeuristic on our behalf. A next logical step is to allow into the character's head....a multi-dimensional leap. This makes it a study in erotic/post-erotic and psychological intrigue. Liking this work.....pow!
my performance is priceless
i'm
viciously numb
The lower case "i" is perfect..it is insightful and hinting at further study and depth...ironically, numb and communicating, here in this poem. It is written in first person, so it is narrative and therefore voyeuristic on our behalf. A next logical step is to allow into the character's head....a multi-dimensional leap. This makes it a study in erotic/post-erotic and psychological intrigue. Liking this work.....pow!
Anonymous
- Edited 12th Jul 2018 3:39am
10th Dec 2012 1:19am
<< post removed >>
13th Dec 2012 11:28pm
18th Dec 2012 3:02pm
You need your own section on here, as your style is truly unique.
I have missed you, yet when I need a taste of you I know where to find you.
Love you my sinful sister.
I have missed you, yet when I need a taste of you I know where to find you.
Love you my sinful sister.
3rd Mar 2013 3:06am
