Covered love..less.

aweee. Missy.  If you only knew what it took for me to post this. I have re read it like 15 times to talk myself out of it.. I appreciate you and yes ma am choked. thank you beautiful. Now I must get back to my dark place..lol. to make up for this one..

No, don't go back, this is ust the kind of poetry that crosses over from well written verse to artistry. This is the path you should follow, the one less travelled... Excellent piece! I have often heard that silence speaks louder than words, so a chior of silent angels can rock the world!!! JJ

Wow. first thank you sir for the breath taking comment you have no idea what from well written verse to artistry just meant to me. thank you i appreciate that with all of me. I can't see myself ever posting something so soft again but i am overwhelmed with the response. from you and missy.

This is jet speed poetry, right at it.

in a bottle
that

There needs to be an emotional break, a graphic break between bottle and that...the return does not cut it hard enough...

say either

in a bottle

that

or

in a bottle....
that

there is some technical way to make that span..but it will accentuate the point you've made.... this is mass-accessible and heart-felt deadly.  Good hit.

That you had a tough time actually posting this shows the difference between a reaction and a response.  Reactions are at the disposal of others, in reaction to whatever.  A response is a point of freedom, a point of identity that measures from the center and makes a decision to act or not act from the heart in its health.  You made a choice on your own, not from woundedness but from beingness.  That's, as JJ says, art.

Well lol. ok thank you. um. yes your right i see what your saying about the break. i shall edit that and appreciate the critique. i take constructive things very well. if only i could get some pointers but after numerous times of seeking them and getting told "oh this is perfect" fuck off its far from perfect. so i have to rely on me. which is why i delete 80% of my posts. lol ok done rambling and not gonna feed your ego anymore.. =)

I love this it's a break from pure darkness yet you still hold your roots in it so well. Amazing :) oh btw can you check your messages? :P I had a questions

Oh my faithful dark darling. i cant wait til you turn 18.. lol. and yes i will check..

You know I turned 18 nearly 2 months ago :)

Oooh shit. all is fair in dark and war. so lovely. you have been faithful since my sign on so i am faithful to you.and now i can comment the way i want too on your stuff..lol

Haha well go through em and comment the way you want :) though I don't see why you didn't before :P

i love this Devlish....

Beautiful and insightful. I hope you can write more like this, it was greatly enjoyable.

Devilish, this brought a lump to my throat.

I enjoyed the seemingly random breaks.  It's lovely.

Phew!

Sad but true, I've known a few in my time that resemble several such of the comments made throughout this.

Excellent write Devilish.

Uley

I don't know what to say to these comments. I'm blown away. I can't believe who has commented. Jest I am honored all of you. I was more worried about fans reading this as soft. Yet I preach about not giving a fuck what others think. This came to me in the middle of the night i've had it for a while and kept talking myself out of posting it. Thank you.

I sent Uley to your piece I read the other day, and he returned the favor by sending me here. I am glad he did.

Damn Child !

Frankly this is closer than I want it to be. You got "it" Darlin, and I can only see you getting more of it as time goes on.  :)  

Love this, awesome work!

Very poignant piece, indeed! Keep up the good work!