collateral damage

This poem was great

thanks M-D

First off, "throte" should be spelled "throat", the eighth line should say, "lifeless and dead" instead of "lifeless an dead". Again in line fifteen you need "and" instead of "an". I think you rushed a bit through the spelling, but other than that this was a really entertaining, interesting, dark, and vivid poem. I absolutely love the last two lines:

"hurry tomorrow...
fucking today was long.."

that's exactly the way I feel some days and that was a great way to put it.

                    Peace and providence,
                               Loki

wow..
thank you for the abundance of input Loki
and when I get a chance I will edit it
with spelling not being my strongest point
and in my opinion if ya can understand the word
it'll do..

you are very welcome, Boreas

was one pretty fucked up day, thanks for the appreciation