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flashed
was heedless leaks of glimmer
moon shine through crack, glows
beacon upon naked coarse nadir
reflection aroused as spring's cold
dismals aching the ever yester
gloom comings momentarily shines
passage of burned out cinders
remains bosom for winter's mime
moon shine through crack, glows
beacon upon naked coarse nadir
reflection aroused as spring's cold
dismals aching the ever yester
gloom comings momentarily shines
passage of burned out cinders
remains bosom for winter's mime
Published 16th Oct 2012
| Edited 19th Oct 2012
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18th Oct 2012 4:42pm
eye love it---!
(you might consider singularizing one'a the plurals
in the 1st line....glimmers to glimmer or leaks to leak...either way would seem more balanced... the 2plurals kinda make for an awkward start to what is otherwise a cool poom---- i guess i'd go with "leaks of glimmer")
where ye been? goo't'see ye again
(you might consider singularizing one'a the plurals
in the 1st line....glimmers to glimmer or leaks to leak...either way would seem more balanced... the 2plurals kinda make for an awkward start to what is otherwise a cool poom---- i guess i'd go with "leaks of glimmer")
where ye been? goo't'see ye again
19th Oct 2012 8:10am
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thank you trippy, i'm addicted to a game currently haha, won't be "that" active here for awhile.
good to see you're still kicking paradoxymoronic !
thank you trippy, i'm addicted to a game currently haha, won't be "that" active here for awhile.
good to see you're still kicking paradoxymoronic !
19th Oct 2012 1:30pm
'addicted to a game'?
o'lord, tis a mighty shame,
that a potentially creative life
would thus turn so lame......
sorry,NakSat...couldn't resist the j'oke
o'lord, tis a mighty shame,
that a potentially creative life
would thus turn so lame......
sorry,NakSat...couldn't resist the j'oke
26th Oct 2012 9:23pm