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lust
Lust
seven deadly sins
lust is mine
because of you
in the morning
at dawn
in the first light
silhouetted against the window
left leg slightly bent
hands gripping the curtains, about to open them
the sun rises between your legs
at breakfast
short robe, loosely tied
front hangs nearly open
off one shoulder
tan skin shows
legs up to there
glimpse of breast as coffee is poured
at noon
straight light brown hair down
tied around your forehead with a narrow ribbon
shirt tail tied in front
only the middle button buttoned
breasts pressed against fabric
jeans worn low and tight
waist button missing, zipper closed
in the evening
shirt knot untied
navel ring flashes
cleavage allows nipple glimpse
zipper part way down
thong shows above jeans
butt sways and wiggles when you walk
glance over your shoulder, wink
that night
ceiling light is off
bed side lamp is dim
bed is turned back
baby doll covers nothing
scent of roses
hand rests on the bed beside you
eyes meet mine
smile beckons
lust
seven deadly sins
lust is mine
because of you
in the morning
at dawn
in the first light
silhouetted against the window
left leg slightly bent
hands gripping the curtains, about to open them
the sun rises between your legs
at breakfast
short robe, loosely tied
front hangs nearly open
off one shoulder
tan skin shows
legs up to there
glimpse of breast as coffee is poured
at noon
straight light brown hair down
tied around your forehead with a narrow ribbon
shirt tail tied in front
only the middle button buttoned
breasts pressed against fabric
jeans worn low and tight
waist button missing, zipper closed
in the evening
shirt knot untied
navel ring flashes
cleavage allows nipple glimpse
zipper part way down
thong shows above jeans
butt sways and wiggles when you walk
glance over your shoulder, wink
that night
ceiling light is off
bed side lamp is dim
bed is turned back
baby doll covers nothing
scent of roses
hand rests on the bed beside you
eyes meet mine
smile beckons
lust
Published 5th Oct 2012
| Edited 30th Oct 2012
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6th Nov 2012 00:53am
I like the concept of this with the fade in and fade out of each scene in turn -- all the things a man likes to observe -- an ideal day of savoring an ideal partner.
It's a nice spin of an idea -- the woman causing the man's sin of lust like a welcome gift to the man.
The image of the sun rising between the woman's legs is a stunner.
Nice read!
It's a nice spin of an idea -- the woman causing the man's sin of lust like a welcome gift to the man.
The image of the sun rising between the woman's legs is a stunner.
Nice read!
6th Nov 2012 4:41pm
Thank you!
Your understanding of what I was trying to do in the poem, tells me that I succeeded.
I appreciate your lengthy comment. It is feedback of that sort that makes writing and publishing worth the considerable effort that goes into it.
Your understanding of what I was trying to do in the poem, tells me that I succeeded.
I appreciate your lengthy comment. It is feedback of that sort that makes writing and publishing worth the considerable effort that goes into it.
