Simpliy musing

Me too we are alike lol xoxo I feel better thanks milkyway

Hey babe, this is so clever, like how it was a continuation. Simply Musing part 2. Great job. It's very sexy, and I'm sure whoever your writing about is very entertained and sexually frustrated right now. Good job. xoxo

I was hoping just for that. Thank you xoxo

I love authors notes. lol. it just gives light of the situation and dials in. this is so fucking beautiful and so much better than arguing . I salute you girl. now i need a towel.

Ha you're to sweet to me xoxox Ty love

Great job, reminds me of someone elses poem ;) Love your style, girl

Haha just musing swear it. Xoxo thanks

Finally, make up sex without the fight!  Shower please....

Haha but make up sex is so much better xoxox thanks

Nice babe!!!! Wow..."Like a lion claiming his prey he lifts me" Great write...

Thanks love doctor.

Gigi

Straight to business.:]

"He crawled to me kissed me deeply
after he made love to me with his tongue
Just his beautiful hands and mouth

['to' is not the right choice. should be replaced with towards.  
second line works well. ]

Cuddling me now my body still sings to feel him inside me

Kissing his chest I feel him stir
Hard for me
Ready
Grabbing his hands I lead him to the shower

The  warm water spraying on us he smiles
Kisses my neck inhales my scent
I'm taking control
Soaping his body up
Paying special attention to his cock
Tracing soft kisses over his chest
I look up at him and whisper
I think about you too you know
I wonder if you're ok if you're sad

[Interesting. Towards the end. And the whole setting makes me smile. Always a winner. Soap and water.]

Like a lion claiming his prey he lifts me
Back against the cold wall holding my hands up above my head
Thrusting inside me hard quick
Loosing ourselves in each other as the water turns cold

[Lion-prey is a bit corny. But works well in this context, almost indicating a shift in powerplay. I will suggest move 'quick' to another line, giving it life.

'Loosing' should be 'losing' ]

We climaxed together over and over
Then fell asleep naked in each others arms!"

[Should be 'climax'. 'Fell' should be 'Fall'. I will personally restructure  this, something like this:

'we climax together
over and over
then we fall asleep
naked
in each other's arms'

I feel it should breathe on its own. Each moment should be alive.:]

And, i always say no to 'Caps' at the beginning of every sentence. Jars the flow.  The exclamation mark in the end is not necessary IMO.

Having said all that, I had fun. You have done well with this exercise Gigi.

Write on,

Sumeet

Thank you summett will fix up! Xoxo

Very true! Have something similar tatted on my back. Thank you BFF xoxox

The last lines make me wonder where they fell asleep - if they were still in the shower they'd surely be found dead of hypothermia or drowned!

Yes they would! Maybe open your mind up to the possibility that maybe they fucked everywhere. Maybe the went outside and fell asleep on the hood of my car. I'll add a boring after they pruned up they went into bed and passed out just for people that can't read between the lines. Thanks for the comment xoxox

The egg is on my red face!  The answer is in the poem. If I had read the last lines properly (this was early morning pre-work when I commented) I would have seen they had fallen asleep in BED!

Nope I changed it. Some just don't read between the lines so I spelt it out

This is the Gg I know and love......."making love against cold, wet walls"  I like the flow of this one.  Very reflective, very sexy

Thank you music xoxoxo been trying to stay away from sexy lol