deepundergroundpoetry.com
Undone
The heart sinks
sun beneath rim of horizon
lost beneath the line
the one crossed
leaving me behind
left as shattered glass
shards cut and tear
bleeding of all I know
stain the page scarlet
the edges pierce
cutting through crimson lines
upon palms spread slow
the need to breath
but busied hands
stifle the exhale
affection merely a suggestion
feelings ended where touch began
lost was the day colors fade
repeat the white and grey
you were the liquid fire
slipping through my hands
though painful to the touch
I would grasp to understand
Undone in the unknowing
No longer kindling for the burning
song no longer tempting
music from another room
A glance in clouded mirror
with refocused eyes
cease to be the one
life in the etching
the journey now has a name
duel over
heal hearts broken bone
toss gloves to the grave
carve your name in stone
cover of book now torn
pages lay unread
though creased and worn
still strong is the spine
choosing to swim
against my own tide
to you
I cut the line
sun beneath rim of horizon
lost beneath the line
the one crossed
leaving me behind
left as shattered glass
shards cut and tear
bleeding of all I know
stain the page scarlet
the edges pierce
cutting through crimson lines
upon palms spread slow
the need to breath
but busied hands
stifle the exhale
affection merely a suggestion
feelings ended where touch began
lost was the day colors fade
repeat the white and grey
you were the liquid fire
slipping through my hands
though painful to the touch
I would grasp to understand
Undone in the unknowing
No longer kindling for the burning
song no longer tempting
music from another room
A glance in clouded mirror
with refocused eyes
cease to be the one
life in the etching
the journey now has a name
duel over
heal hearts broken bone
toss gloves to the grave
carve your name in stone
cover of book now torn
pages lay unread
though creased and worn
still strong is the spine
choosing to swim
against my own tide
to you
I cut the line
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 13
reading list entries 2
comments 30
reads 222
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
Re: Undone
14th Sep 2012 1:48pm
Anonymous
- Edited 16th May 2018 10:05pm
14th Sep 2012 4:07pm
<< post removed >>
![Anonymous](/images/avatars/_nopicmini.gif)
re: Re: Undone
14th Sep 2012 6:18pm
Anonymous
- Edited 8th Jan 2019 00:35am
14th Sep 2012 4:12pm
<< post removed >>
![Anonymous](/images/avatars/_nopicmini.gif)
re: Re: Undone
14th Sep 2012 6:19pm
Re: Undone
14th Sep 2012 4:31pm
i think this is my new favorite of yours...it's so deep and wonderfully written...excellent work, my friend :)
0
![Thumbs Up thumb](/images/poetry/thumb.gif)
re: Re: Undone
14th Sep 2012 6:19pm
Re: Undone
14th Sep 2012 6:19pm
re: Re: Undone
14th Sep 2012 6:31pm
Re: Undone
Anonymous
14th Sep 2012 6:59pm
Beautiful Ken. Painful, but beautiful nonetheless!
![Anonymous](/images/avatars/_nopicmini.gif)
0
![Thumbs Up thumb](/images/poetry/thumb.gif)
re: Re: Undone
14th Sep 2012 11:28pm
Thank you. Some pains hurt much less when we realize we don't have to endure them any longer.
Re: Undone
14th Sep 2012 11:27pm
re: Re: Undone
14th Sep 2012 11:30pm
Anonymous
- Edited 14th Nov 2018 6:35pm
16th Sep 2012 00:10am
<< post removed >>
![Anonymous](/images/avatars/_nopicmini.gif)
re: Re: Undone
16th Sep 2012 6:52am
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 7:52pm
16th Sep 2012 5:59pm
<< post removed >>
![Anonymous](/images/avatars/_nopicmini.gif)
re: Re: Undone
16th Sep 2012 7:03pm
Anonymous
- Edited 26th Jun 2018 9:39pm
18th Sep 2012 3:43am
<< post removed >>
![Anonymous](/images/avatars/_nopicmini.gif)
re: Re: Undone
18th Sep 2012 3:52am
Anonymous
- Edited 26th Jun 2018 9:39pm
19th Sep 2012 4:56pm
<< post removed >>
![Anonymous](/images/avatars/_nopicmini.gif)
re: Re: Undone
19th Sep 2012 5:05pm
Re: Undone
21st Sep 2012 3:17am
re: Re: Undone
21st Sep 2012 3:40am
Re: Undone
This is a really nice, deep poem. You hit the bar and shot it up high. I really liked this piece! straight to the reading list! ><
<3, Mira
<3, Mira
0
![Thumbs Up thumb](/images/poetry/thumb.gif)
re: Re: Undone
24th Sep 2012 1:29pm
Anonymous
- Edited 16th May 2018 7:36pm
24th Sep 2012 4:28pm
<< post removed >>
![Anonymous](/images/avatars/_nopicmini.gif)
Anonymous
- Edited 14th Oct 2019 5:35am
9th Mar 2013 5:01am
<< post removed >>
![Anonymous](/images/avatars/_nopicmini.gif)
re: Re: Undone
10th Mar 2013 3:04pm