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not even perfection
majestic
amber glow
of scarlet
curves
rest
over swirls
of diluted jade
and intense
sapphire waters
minutes of elegance
swept away
as perfection
abandons the heavens
nothing
lasts forever
amber glow
of scarlet
curves
rest
over swirls
of diluted jade
and intense
sapphire waters
minutes of elegance
swept away
as perfection
abandons the heavens
nothing
lasts forever
Written by
raorrick
(Rachel O.)
Published 23rd Aug 2012
| Edited 25th Aug 2012
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Anonymous
- Edited 16th May 2018 10:05pm
23rd Aug 2012 10:24pm
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23rd Aug 2012 11:05pm
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"majestic amber glows of scarlet curves" Magic with your words!! Great job sweetheart!
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23rd Aug 2012 10:51pm
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23rd Aug 2012 11:17pm
Beautiful Rachel, as always, you never disappoint it is a pleasure to read you.
Red
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24th Aug 2012 1:00am
I agree with everyone's comments above. Beautiful, indeed, Rachel. Absolutely wonderful and simply captivating!!!
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24th Aug 2012 4:11am
These moments of splendor are precious. How amazing we get to enjoy and breathe deeply so many of these timeless moments.
Your foray into minimal word usage succeeds. Lovely :)
Your foray into minimal word usage succeeds. Lovely :)
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24th Aug 2012 6:14am
Thank you so much milkyway.
I feel the exact same about your words as well.
Thanks for stopping by.
~XxX~
I feel the exact same about your words as well.
Thanks for stopping by.
~XxX~
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Wow, thank you so much for such a gracious comment. I am truly appreciative.
Ah, I am a horrible speller and my red lines aren't working. Thank you for that, I will fix it.
~X~
Ah, I am a horrible speller and my red lines aren't working. Thank you for that, I will fix it.
~X~
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24th Aug 2012 2:37pm
Aww, what a wonderful thing to say. I'm glad you like it. Thank you so much, it means so much for you to stop by.
~XxX~
~XxX~
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Anonymous
24th Aug 2012 3:03pm
The description is at least as beautiful as any sunset I've ever seen. Simply Beautiful.
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24th Aug 2012 3:08pm
Oh wow! That is really a great compliment. Thank you very much for saying that.
So glad you stopped by.
~X~
So glad you stopped by.
~X~
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24th Aug 2012 3:10pm
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24th Aug 2012 3:21pm
I love that phrase. It is very true. Thank you for that miki, and for stopping by and commenting. It means a lot to me.
I hope you are feeling well, or will be soon.
~XX~
I hope you are feeling well, or will be soon.
~XX~
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25th Aug 2012 12:34pm
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25th Aug 2012 12:54pm
I would never ignore such sound advice from a great poet like yourself.
I think glow is better.
Scarlet is a red/orange color, I used to describe the color the sky looks as the sun is setting.
I agree, it is better with more space. Thank you fot that.
I really appreciate the time and effort in your feedback Mr. A ;)
Thank you.
I think glow is better.
Scarlet is a red/orange color, I used to describe the color the sky looks as the sun is setting.
I agree, it is better with more space. Thank you fot that.
I really appreciate the time and effort in your feedback Mr. A ;)
Thank you.
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