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My Child Forsaken
repulsive waves of escape
surround my existence
innocence stares
cries
reaches
for me
shamefully
I turn
it
is not enough
to rescue me
surround my existence
innocence stares
cries
reaches
for me
shamefully
I turn
it
is not enough
to rescue me
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Re: Angel Forsaken
20th Aug 2012 1:01am
re: Re: Angel Forsaken
Anonymous
- Edited 25th Sep 2019 1:37am
20th Aug 2012 1:05am
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re: Re: Angel Forsaken
20th Aug 2012 6:45am
Indie!
Thank you so much for your feedback! I agree with it instead of this, however, I can't wrap my head around reach. I will ponder it a bit more though.
This came about accidentally, so I am glad that it works.
Thanks for stopping by.
XxXxX
Thank you so much for your feedback! I agree with it instead of this, however, I can't wrap my head around reach. I will ponder it a bit more though.
This came about accidentally, so I am glad that it works.
Thanks for stopping by.
XxXxX
Anonymous
- Edited 14th Nov 2018 6:35pm
20th Aug 2012 1:13am
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re: Angel Forsaken
20th Aug 2012 6:46am
Anonymous
- Edited 16th May 2018 10:05pm
20th Aug 2012 3:15am
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re: Re: Angel Forsaken
20th Aug 2012 6:46am
Anonymous
- Edited 8th Jan 2019 00:35am
20th Aug 2012 8:04am
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re: Re: My Child Forsaken
20th Aug 2012 9:42am
Re: My Child Forsaken
20th Aug 2012 9:35am
The hopelessness expressed is deflating. Even the waves of escape are repulsive. Powerful piece.
Good morning Rachel :)
Good morning Rachel :)
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re: Re: My Child Forsaken
20th Aug 2012 9:41am
Good morning Ken!
Thank you so much for stopping by. It is always a pleasure.
Happy and safe travels to you this Monday. :)
Thank you so much for stopping by. It is always a pleasure.
Happy and safe travels to you this Monday. :)
Anonymous
- Edited 18th Nov 2022 2:35am
21st Aug 2012 2:53am
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re: Re: My Child Forsaken
21st Aug 2012 9:59pm
I absolutely love when you comment on my poems. You have such enthusiasm and are brilliant and saying why you like something.
I am thrilled that you stopped by Betty. Thank you!
X
I am thrilled that you stopped by Betty. Thank you!
X
Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 5:40pm
23rd Aug 2012 11:07am
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Al, dang!
I adore you. I am always honored when you stop by and leave such amazing feedback.
I am thrilled this worked.
Thank you for your encouragement.
~XxX~
I adore you. I am always honored when you stop by and leave such amazing feedback.
I am thrilled this worked.
Thank you for your encouragement.
~XxX~
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 7:38pm
23rd Aug 2012 2:38pm
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re: Re: My Child Forsaken
23rd Aug 2012 9:21pm
Re: My Child Forsaken
Anonymous
28th Aug 2012 12:46pm
very impressed with your writing skills!
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re: Re: My Child Forsaken
28th Aug 2012 1:29pm