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Forever Tortured
devoured by a darkness so evil
it frightens the night
encased forever in these walls
of scarred wood and teeth marks
proof of my failed attempts to escape
chaffed, ashen grey flesh covered bones
from years of sitting in my own waste
and a decade’s worth of crimson vomit
of meal scraps, wood chips and plastic
every other sun rise, I am drawn from my womb
fastened to a bed of anguish and agony
while a forceful slew of men and woman
lace my body with their poison
before they’d blister my skin, and abandon me again
clinging to the euphony of radio harmonies
used to drown out my cries
songs of those who claim to know my pain
they are my only companion, my solace
like a treasure box of fool’s gold found at sea
I now have deliverance from the vile cruelty
but inside, I am still weighed down by my onyx heart
rescued I may be, but tortured I will be forever
about Lauren
a small clip of some of her story
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Cpulg7FSZTQ&hd=1
entered in the "Walking with someone else's toes" comp.
it frightens the night
encased forever in these walls
of scarred wood and teeth marks
proof of my failed attempts to escape
chaffed, ashen grey flesh covered bones
from years of sitting in my own waste
and a decade’s worth of crimson vomit
of meal scraps, wood chips and plastic
every other sun rise, I am drawn from my womb
fastened to a bed of anguish and agony
while a forceful slew of men and woman
lace my body with their poison
before they’d blister my skin, and abandon me again
clinging to the euphony of radio harmonies
used to drown out my cries
songs of those who claim to know my pain
they are my only companion, my solace
like a treasure box of fool’s gold found at sea
I now have deliverance from the vile cruelty
but inside, I am still weighed down by my onyx heart
rescued I may be, but tortured I will be forever
about Lauren
a small clip of some of her story
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Cpulg7FSZTQ&hd=1
entered in the "Walking with someone else's toes" comp.
Written by
raorrick
(Rachel O.)
Published 9th Aug 2012
| Edited 10th Aug 2012
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Anonymous
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10th Aug 2012 00:30am
Thank you Doc. No prescription needed then, huh?
I am so glad you stopped by. Much appreciated.
I am so glad you stopped by. Much appreciated.
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10th Aug 2012 00:31am
Wow Aish, thank you. The video isn't even as bad as what I had read. Horrible abuse.
Thank you much for stopping by, commenting and adding the piece. It is much appreciated.
Thank you much for stopping by, commenting and adding the piece. It is much appreciated.
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10th Aug 2012 00:07am
A wicked reality this girl lived. You portray the void left from the abuse strongly.
Awesome piece, hellish people.
Awesome piece, hellish people.
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10th Aug 2012 00:34am
Yes, wicked, hellish monsters.
Thanks for stopping by and complimenting.
Much appreciated.
Thanks for stopping by and complimenting.
Much appreciated.
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10th Aug 2012 7:09pm
well,first of all I can imagine how hard this was for you to write.
"devoured by darkness so evil
it frightens the night"
is a wonderful opener, I wonder if it might be worthwhile sticking an 'a' after 'by' on the first line.
even without looking up the link you posted, I think the reader is given sufficient information to understand the suffering caused and felt.
A hard story to read, only made bearable by the way you wrote it.
shine on!
"devoured by darkness so evil
it frightens the night"
is a wonderful opener, I wonder if it might be worthwhile sticking an 'a' after 'by' on the first line.
even without looking up the link you posted, I think the reader is given sufficient information to understand the suffering caused and felt.
A hard story to read, only made bearable by the way you wrote it.
shine on!
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Oh wow, amazing how one letter can intensify the meaning of an entire sentence like that.
Really great advice.
Yeah, the story will definitely haunt me for a while.
You wonder, it took 8 years to find her, how many are not found?
So glad you stopped by Eamonn, always a pleasure. ;)
~XxXxX~
ps: thanks again for your eye pre post :)
Really great advice.
Yeah, the story will definitely haunt me for a while.
You wonder, it took 8 years to find her, how many are not found?
So glad you stopped by Eamonn, always a pleasure. ;)
~XxXxX~
ps: thanks again for your eye pre post :)
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10th Aug 2012 10:22pm
I am so proud of you. You have been kicking butt day in and day out.
I told you as a newcomer you had a gift and I was right.
Such a horrific way for anyone to live.
I told you as a newcomer you had a gift and I was right.
Such a horrific way for anyone to live.
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11th Aug 2012 2:02am
Thank you Kym. Your encouragement is part of what made me feel like I should keep at it. :)
Yes, very horrific.
I am so glad you stopped by. :)
~xXxXx~
Yes, very horrific.
I am so glad you stopped by. :)
~xXxXx~
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13th Aug 2012 1:18pm
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13th Aug 2012 8:40pm
"acquiescence" love that word to describe the final line. I am glad I was able to make it real, difficult as it was to write.
I appreciate you stopping by and leaving such kind words. Thank you.
I appreciate you stopping by and leaving such kind words. Thank you.
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