Our Words

wonderfully written.
i love how the emotions
cling to the words.
very good.

thank you so much for the wonderfuul feedback. i'm very glad you like it~*

this is very nice.
i like it alot (:

Thank you very much.

piece of writing, I like your use of metaphors, they're so descriptive and elegant.
If I had to choose my favourite line, I think it'd be "Dirty, grass strained the perfume of the world" - it captures the image so vividly.
Great poem :)

thank you so much for the feedback i really appriecate it and im so glad you like it.

Our words fell as the autumn leaves
Beautiful and useless

(autumn leaves actually serve a purpose)

They are colourful like fires around me

(is like needed? )

I threw myself back into them
Arms stretched

(good image though the tense feels wrong, IE. are colourful....threw

Self trusting and ignorant

(feels a little awkward)

Into the cruel cold snow
My tears "," frozen words on my cheeks
I’d keep them for you

(would "have kept" work better?)

But they melted away
With the spring "'"s gentle rays
Caressing my face
As the earth interwove flowers to (in) my hair
Covered my naked tree with buds
Half formed words waiting to be heard
I walk on foals legs stumbling and unsure
Dirty, grass strained the perfume of the world
Clung to my skin
You found me
My words written in air
I wrapped in the embrace of the summer sun
I dance with the breeze
The chimes of my laugh
Hang jewels on your ears
Let them remind you
I was here

the last 12 lines feel a little out of sync. (of kilter).

for me the tense of the poem needs to be more clear for the reader and the grammar needs also to be looked at.

i did like the content and some of the images though

a few words could be cut without harming the poem.

in the first line;

Our words fell as the autumn leaves

"the"

thanks for the read, JMO.

Thank you i'll be sure to revisit the poem and take your comments into consideration~*