Untouchable

Rachel, wow...the imagery here is amazing, I have a visual immediately as I read this.  

Thanks Levi. Always great to have you stop by. :)

The 1st stanza is a nightmare to imagine.

Your minimalist approach works very well. You are the most diverse poet I've read here.

Haha, it is only because I don't know what I am doing that makes me seem diverse.

I like the compliment anyway though. :)

Thank you for your feed back Ken, as always it is a pleasure.

Thank you Magdalena. I truly appreciate your kind words. They mean a lot. :)

I appreciate this kind of feed back tremendously.  
 
Verse 1 - Wow, you are right, repetition does nothing for it, and it now sounds awful to me. Fixed.  
 
Verse 2 - I thought about it not fitting as well. My train of thought - what does the inside of a coffin look like? "Aqua swirls" refers to the satin on the inside of a coffin. Maybe smell like? Rose pedals for the roses one might be buried with. I wanted her to be surrounded by something beautiful. Then untouchable.  
 
Verse 3 - The reason - She screwed up. Now she is suffering the consequences of it. Everything around her that is beautiful, that she once could touch, she no longer can. She is dead to the world around her, and therefore feels dead her self.  
 
She made her bed and now has to lie in it kind of thing.  
 
I see now though, how this is sparse. I will come back to it in a few days and add more meat to it, to make it more understandable.  
 
I am grateful for your honesty.  
I also appreciate this comment, "though having followed your writing I know there is a deeper meaning here".  
There is always deeper meaning and if it doesn't come out, I want someone to tell me.  
 
Thanks for your time, Indie

Thank you Strider, much appreciated. :)

Thank you Miki. I appreciate that! :)
So glad you stopped by.

Wow very deep. Very. It's a poem many can relate to. I love them kind of poems

Awesom Gigi. Thanks a bunch! It sucks that you can relate. But I am glad t came across to you.
Thanks for stopping by. :)

Aww Crim, I'm sorry you can relate :-/

Glad you stopped by though, thanks so much for your kind words :)

Wow loaded with double entendre, a very clever and profound piece.

"double entendre"
I like that!

Thanks so much for stopping by and leaving such a great comment. I appreciate that. :D

Great advice Jack, thanks, aww petals, should have caught that.

Thank you so much for your time, it is much appreciated.

the satin lining of the coffin morbidly comfortable this poem brought me back to funerals of the past and reminded me of my own mortality lol . awsome poetry!!!

Thank you!