Masterpiece

Aww, well thank you very much Magdalena, that means a lot.

Devastating reality for far too many. In our world of "enlightenment" there is a wickedness that prevails as many women are still tethered through circumstances (children or financial) to the abuser.

I've meandered through some of your sharings and you have a strong, stirring voice through your words.

Yes Ken, you are quite right about the tether. It is a sad reality for sure.

Thank you so much for your very kind words. They mean a lot to me. :)

Rachel

Good to see this coming from you. It means
you are ending the dry spell. On a damn good
note.:) I can see that you have had some
inspiration for 'Masterpiece' which is rather
effective here.

The thread bare minimalism makes this potent
times many.

I like the logical development you have showcased. For a moment I felt that <your life>
should rather have a companion finale piece that would describe the narrater's final truth.

But then, leaving that to the reader is wiser undoubtedly. For post the zenith in the end not much is left for imagination.

Lack of punctuation and capitalization works very well here. Honestly I don't have any constructive critique to offer other than to
say 'well done poetess.'

Write on,

Sumeet

Yay!
Thank you Sumeet.

If you are talking about the picture being my inspiration, I must correct you and tell you that I found that picture after I wrote the poem. I was amazed to find such a picture though, as I feel it brings the poem together.

I am very glad that you stopped by and left such a great comment. Thank you.

No. I did not mean the picture.:)
Inarticulate tellers depend on the inanimate
to tell tales. The better tellers take inspiration
in the living, breathing things. You are the latter.
 
There are many who espouse minimalism in their work.
The present form reminds me of a great. Especially
the use of  angle quotes or single guillemets here.

And that is a complement, Rachel.
 
Write on.

And a great compliment it is Sumeet, it means a lot to me, truly :)

Rachel; this is a work of art, plain and simple. well done!


Gypsy red

I really appreciate that Gypsy. Thank you so much for your kind words. :)

Thank you Crim, that means a lot. :)

That is very nice of you Kitty. Thank you so much for your kind words. It means a lot to me. :)

I love it rachel very cut and dry :)

Thank you very much Paul, much appreciated.

Thanks Betty. I am glad that you "LIKES" it! So glad you stopped by. :)

Rachel.

This is an excellent write. I love the structure you have (How do you think of these things?) and the way you have the headings done.

the poem itself is powerful stuff and brutal as mentioned above.

got to take my cap off to you here Rachel, fair play to you .

Justification at last! Only when you arrive Eamonn. :D Truly.

I don't "come up" with anything with premeditation. I just like to see if I can make sense with as little words as possible. I enjoy that challenge sometimes.

I am so glad that you stopped by. Thanks! :)

Terse use
of structure
paints the subject
without a hint
of Stockholm
so that
victimization
is used
a victory
in irony to turn
the frame
into a canvas:
Do some more.

"victimization
is used
a victory"

I love that. Thank you for your comment. Very cool. :)

For me this was personally jolting

for I refer to my most important Muse as

"Masterpiece" in the

most tender, respectful, loving way.

Shook me up R-O .....

harrowing read -- which , I guess , is a good thing : > )

I'll take that as a compliment. If you were shook up, then you felt. I always want to make people feel.

Thank you much for stopping by and leaving your words.

I do appreciate it! :D

this is the kind of poem i would write but can't.

Thanks for that compliment, it is much appreciated!

Don't sell yourself short. I'm sure you can write something to equal or better value. :)