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Con il cuore pesante ti ho visto lasciare
*"Quando sei lontana sogno all' orizzonte e mancan le parole,e io si lo so che sei con me, con me,tu mia luna tu sei qui con me,mio sole tu sei qui con me,con me, con me," -Andrea Bocelli
Watching you walk calmly away I asked myself
if there ever was such a thing as a 'good bye
People talk of time and healing
nonsensical cliche phrases
just to have something to say to try and make a bad day better
and though I didn't hang my head or harbor some silly wish to die
I know that I will grieve a little
every time I close my eyes and see you leave
with the noon sun reflecting the tiny specks of rusty flecks that hug your shoulders
There's a lady in the street belting out 'Time to say goodbye'
with a great voice for a sad song and the irony isn't lost on me
I join the crowd that's gathering around a puppeteer with a dancing wooden puppet
My mind is still swimming in the remnants of last night's spirits
still playing its scenes in a constant loop
and I sure hope that when all is said and done
there'll be at least one thing that keeps the craic alive
on the cold days that border on mundane
when the winds that threaten your window panes
are switched for the warm glow of wherever it is you decide to go
for the birth of times to come.
but I've never felt so far from home,so destitute and so alone that it hurts to breathe
and I'm nowhere near any place that I can just hide away put my face into my hands
to block all these people that are crowding around the puppeteer and his dancing wooden puppet.
*When you're far away I dream on the 'horizon and words fail, and yes, I know you're with me, with me, you, my moon, are here with me, my sun, you are here with me with me with me*
Watching you walk calmly away I asked myself
if there ever was such a thing as a 'good bye
People talk of time and healing
nonsensical cliche phrases
just to have something to say to try and make a bad day better
and though I didn't hang my head or harbor some silly wish to die
I know that I will grieve a little
every time I close my eyes and see you leave
with the noon sun reflecting the tiny specks of rusty flecks that hug your shoulders
There's a lady in the street belting out 'Time to say goodbye'
with a great voice for a sad song and the irony isn't lost on me
I join the crowd that's gathering around a puppeteer with a dancing wooden puppet
My mind is still swimming in the remnants of last night's spirits
still playing its scenes in a constant loop
and I sure hope that when all is said and done
there'll be at least one thing that keeps the craic alive
on the cold days that border on mundane
when the winds that threaten your window panes
are switched for the warm glow of wherever it is you decide to go
for the birth of times to come.
but I've never felt so far from home,so destitute and so alone that it hurts to breathe
and I'm nowhere near any place that I can just hide away put my face into my hands
to block all these people that are crowding around the puppeteer and his dancing wooden puppet.
*When you're far away I dream on the 'horizon and words fail, and yes, I know you're with me, with me, you, my moon, are here with me, my sun, you are here with me with me with me*
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Anonymous
- Edited 18th Nov 2022 2:35am
6th Jun 2012 1:50am
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6th Jun 2012 2:19am
Betty,
High praise indeed, many thanks for your read and comment.
I've fixed up whenever (thanks again)
I recon moving someone constitutes a result of some kind (thanks again)
Eamonn.
High praise indeed, many thanks for your read and comment.
I've fixed up whenever (thanks again)
I recon moving someone constitutes a result of some kind (thanks again)
Eamonn.
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6th Jun 2012 2:17am
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6th Jun 2012 2:35am
Gigi.
'The Amazing Eamonn' does have a sort of ring to it in a three ring circus kind of way.
Thanks lot's for your visit and comment Gigi
'The Amazing Eamonn' does have a sort of ring to it in a three ring circus kind of way.
Thanks lot's for your visit and comment Gigi
Anonymous
- Edited 17th May 2018 7:36pm
6th Jun 2012 2:43am
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6th Jun 2012 3:11am
Steve.
wow! Always appreciate your stopping by and commenting. I've fixed 'breathe. (totally missed that a few times)
I wasn't 100% on the line breaks myself, coming from a place where I used to always try and make my lines look the same size I've been experimenting with different structures and breaks .
I am happy though that the lines and breaks suit the poem and glad that you could spot it.
The Fonzie in me wants to say "ah no real effort at all man, just threw a few words down on a page and posted" but yeah I've spent a while trying to articulate what was floating around my head.
Thanks again Steve for your in-depth comment.
PS. check " great *are into crafting "
sorry couldn't resist :)
wow! Always appreciate your stopping by and commenting. I've fixed 'breathe. (totally missed that a few times)
I wasn't 100% on the line breaks myself, coming from a place where I used to always try and make my lines look the same size I've been experimenting with different structures and breaks .
I am happy though that the lines and breaks suit the poem and glad that you could spot it.
The Fonzie in me wants to say "ah no real effort at all man, just threw a few words down on a page and posted" but yeah I've spent a while trying to articulate what was floating around my head.
Thanks again Steve for your in-depth comment.
PS. check " great *are into crafting "
sorry couldn't resist :)
Anonymous
- Edited 17th May 2018 7:36pm
6th Jun 2012 3:13am
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Anonymous
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6th Jun 2012 10:20am
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6th Jun 2012 3:00pm
Mr A.
Thank's for your comment. I'll go fix threaten now thanks for that.
Craic V crack has been the source of many a banter thrown back and fourth between myself and a Scottish friend (who pronounces it Crayic)
Thanks again for your visit Mr A.
Thank's for your comment. I'll go fix threaten now thanks for that.
Craic V crack has been the source of many a banter thrown back and fourth between myself and a Scottish friend (who pronounces it Crayic)
Thanks again for your visit Mr A.
Anonymous
- Edited 16th Sep 2020 7:37pm
6th Jun 2012 12:32pm
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6th Jun 2012 3:12pm
Missy Sub
I must say I have been caught a bit off guard by your comment and the others above and below you.
They are very encouraging to receive so I thank you kindly for your one.
Just watched that clip and you are right there are more than a few parallel's between the poem and the clip. very astute of you to put them together.
I must say I have been caught a bit off guard by your comment and the others above and below you.
They are very encouraging to receive so I thank you kindly for your one.
Just watched that clip and you are right there are more than a few parallel's between the poem and the clip. very astute of you to put them together.
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 11:36am
6th Jun 2012 2:05pm
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6th Jun 2012 3:19pm
Jesta, me o'l flower.
There was absolutely no sobbing :) anyone says anything different is totally lying.
I thank you for dropping in and leaving your footprint.
The Italian was a big part of this for me, I wanted to quote the whole thing but it took up too much space.
Glad you liked this.
There was absolutely no sobbing :) anyone says anything different is totally lying.
I thank you for dropping in and leaving your footprint.
The Italian was a big part of this for me, I wanted to quote the whole thing but it took up too much space.
Glad you liked this.
Re: Con il cuore pesante ti ho visto lasciare
6th Jun 2012 3:25pm
Everyone else had a lot of good things to say about this. I am completetly speechless. Bravo!
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6th Jun 2012 4:10pm
Re: Con il cuore pesante ti ho visto lasciare
6th Jun 2012 5:17pm
You already know how I feel about this, but I wanted to add because Jestalessa said it perfectly, "the tightening before a sob". That is the perfect description of this poem. The rise of the lump in your throat. So good Eamonn, but I'm still mad. =P
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6th Jun 2012 10:20pm
Rachel.
yeah, It's a pretty good description in fairness.
Glad you dropped in and threw down your thoughts down.
Happy that you liked this poem and sure I reckon you'll get over the madness (bit of therapy or electric shock treatment should do the trick)
yeah, It's a pretty good description in fairness.
Glad you dropped in and threw down your thoughts down.
Happy that you liked this poem and sure I reckon you'll get over the madness (bit of therapy or electric shock treatment should do the trick)
Anonymous
- Edited 21st May 2018 7:36pm
6th Jun 2012 9:35pm
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6th Jun 2012 10:23pm
"my meatloaf is burning"
I think I can safely say I've never heard it put like that before but we are writers after all..
Thank you much for the read and 'like' Devlin
I think I can safely say I've never heard it put like that before but we are writers after all..
Thank you much for the read and 'like' Devlin
:)
7th Jun 2012 1:48pm
Eamon,
My man.:)
It reminded me(like one other time) of the first read I read you. It was my first poem on DU and when I finished reading that, I was glad I had joined this place and read that.
Deja Vu.
Everything that was to to be said has been probably said. And these days I talk more or less in adjectives. So I won't.
Well, you have done well to capture the essence of an universal emotion-something we are all destined to feel all our lives-in a fashion, that seems effortless, despite being painstakingly created and beautiful, in things it ends up saying. I feel there is more beauty in the pauses and the things that have not been said.
I loved the setting a lot. The whole atmosphere works like curtains on stage. They reveal information right on time, making it worthwhile.
Puppet show is a befitting metaphor here. Very effective.
The last stanza is a peek into the wooden box that has 'meloncholie' captured and stored in it. Only it is a forever.:)
This poem is like being thrown off an airplane by the most angelic thing. Once you are done, it's free fall. And man, you know the feeling, We, all do.
Respect,
Sumeet
My man.:)
It reminded me(like one other time) of the first read I read you. It was my first poem on DU and when I finished reading that, I was glad I had joined this place and read that.
Deja Vu.
Everything that was to to be said has been probably said. And these days I talk more or less in adjectives. So I won't.
Well, you have done well to capture the essence of an universal emotion-something we are all destined to feel all our lives-in a fashion, that seems effortless, despite being painstakingly created and beautiful, in things it ends up saying. I feel there is more beauty in the pauses and the things that have not been said.
I loved the setting a lot. The whole atmosphere works like curtains on stage. They reveal information right on time, making it worthwhile.
Puppet show is a befitting metaphor here. Very effective.
The last stanza is a peek into the wooden box that has 'meloncholie' captured and stored in it. Only it is a forever.:)
This poem is like being thrown off an airplane by the most angelic thing. Once you are done, it's free fall. And man, you know the feeling, We, all do.
Respect,
Sumeet
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8th Jun 2012 12:29pm
Sumeet, my man
Well I'm not sure I deserve this litany of praises coming from you.
Deja Vu. haha! the irony
I like and agree with everything you say Sumeet and should point out that the evidence suggests that you are one soul that is in touch with his feelings constantly.
I thank you kindly for your words.
shine on man!
Well I'm not sure I deserve this litany of praises coming from you.
Deja Vu. haha! the irony
I like and agree with everything you say Sumeet and should point out that the evidence suggests that you are one soul that is in touch with his feelings constantly.
I thank you kindly for your words.
shine on man!
Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 5:37pm
8th Jun 2012 1:05am
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re: Re: Con il cuore pesante ti ho visto lasciare
8th Jun 2012 12:38pm
Aglitch.
Ah the art of surprise, black ops poetry :)
yeah I kind of like that stanza myself. the particular scene was probably the foundation that the poem was built on.
good that you'd pick that one out.
your comment is an honor to receive considering how much I admire your ability.
thanks lots.
Ah the art of surprise, black ops poetry :)
yeah I kind of like that stanza myself. the particular scene was probably the foundation that the poem was built on.
good that you'd pick that one out.
your comment is an honor to receive considering how much I admire your ability.
thanks lots.
Re: Con il cuore pesante ti ho visto lasciare
8th Jun 2012 11:08am
I feel it will take me a little while to swallow the lump in my throat and shake the sadness that this piece has brought on. Beautiful work, as always.
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8th Jun 2012 12:42pm
There you are Starlight ;)
many apologies for the lump and sadness.
Thanks lots for reading and throwing down your words .
shine on!
many apologies for the lump and sadness.
Thanks lots for reading and throwing down your words .
shine on!
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Here I am. :)
No apologies needed. It is a sign of a job well done, isn't it?
No apologies needed. It is a sign of a job well done, isn't it?
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Re: Con il cuore pesante ti ho visto lasciare
8th Jun 2012 12:53pm
This one is so beautifully executed! I am looking at myself how fool I was because I have not read you for so long.
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8th Jun 2012 1:07pm
Annando my friend.
you are no fool.
Thanks for reading and commenting. glad to see you here.
you are no fool.
Thanks for reading and commenting. glad to see you here.
Anonymous
- Edited 16th May 2018 7:35pm
9th Jun 2012 6:58pm
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Kitty.
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this little poem.
Your words are very important to us.
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this little poem.
Your words are very important to us.
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10th Jun 2012 7:12pm
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11th Jun 2012 12:01pm
Crims.
great to see you knocking about :)
hope all is well with you .
thanks for dropping in and leaving your kindness.
great to see you knocking about :)
hope all is well with you .
thanks for dropping in and leaving your kindness.
Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 5:40pm
15th Jun 2012 6:36am
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15th Jun 2012 11:56am
Aish.
well that's very good of you to say.
Thanks lots for dropping in and throwing your thoughts down on this poem.
much appreciated.
well that's very good of you to say.
Thanks lots for dropping in and throwing your thoughts down on this poem.
much appreciated.
Anonymous
- Edited 8th Jan 2019 00:35am
16th Jun 2012 9:21am
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Re: Con il cuore pesante ti ho visto lasciare
17th Jun 2012 2:25pm
Summultima.
I was very unsure of this at first so figured i'd test the waters with it at pulp.
I knew you were here but I wasn't sure of your handle:)
Thanks for dropping in and leaving your wonderful thoughts.
I was very unsure of this at first so figured i'd test the waters with it at pulp.
I knew you were here but I wasn't sure of your handle:)
Thanks for dropping in and leaving your wonderful thoughts.
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22nd Jun 2012 8:07pm
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23rd Jun 2012 11:41am