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All Is Lost (Read By Miss_Sub)!!!
an entrusted endeavor was hers to be cherished;
nourished without blemish, dusk to dawn
infinite nothingness flourished unless perfected
her coveted role was of the highest honor
more desired than being born of royalty
a grace that was given only to the purest soul; then
as she laid eternally peaceful in her solitary
[he] a purely immaculate “god” peaked arousal
an instant adoration of the hell within this entity
blemished now; flawed by his tranquil seduction
blinded by the illumination of his aura
numbed by the trace of his poisoned whisper; she
neglectfully betrayed all existence
endless tornado's of chaos swirled without direction;
pandemonium persisted, uprooted mountainous confusion
the sea devoured all; creation stripped away
only hollowed emptiness remained
she became swallowed by grief
Mother Nature lost her child
© Rachel Orrick 2012
nourished without blemish, dusk to dawn
infinite nothingness flourished unless perfected
her coveted role was of the highest honor
more desired than being born of royalty
a grace that was given only to the purest soul; then
as she laid eternally peaceful in her solitary
[he] a purely immaculate “god” peaked arousal
an instant adoration of the hell within this entity
blemished now; flawed by his tranquil seduction
blinded by the illumination of his aura
numbed by the trace of his poisoned whisper; she
neglectfully betrayed all existence
endless tornado's of chaos swirled without direction;
pandemonium persisted, uprooted mountainous confusion
the sea devoured all; creation stripped away
only hollowed emptiness remained
she became swallowed by grief
Mother Nature lost her child
© Rachel Orrick 2012
Written by
raorrick
(Rachel O.)
Published 31st May 2012
| Edited 28th Jun 2012
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31st May 2012 8:05am
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re: Re: All Is Lost
31st May 2012 10:17pm
Thank you so much, Missy...it means a lot coming from someone of your talent. :)
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31st May 2012 10:17pm
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re: All Is Lost
31st May 2012 10:18pm
Thank you Magdalena, that means a lot to me that you stopped by, red and liked. :)
Re: All Is Lost
31st May 2012 1:03pm
I agree with Indie, this is a beautifully worked out, well written piece that contains within such a sad story. You are extremely brave to write this out and I thank you for doing so.
Be safe D xx
Be safe D xx
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31st May 2012 10:19pm
And I thank you for reading and commenting. I truly appreciate your feedback! :)
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31st May 2012 10:19pm
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7th Jun 2012 4:13am
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re: Re: All Is Lost (Read By Miss_Sub)!!!
7th Jun 2012 4:14am
Re: All Is Lost (Read By Miss_Sub)!!!
Rachel.
It's amazing how you have grown so quick in your writing. this poem is nothing short of brilliant.
"an entrusted endeavor was hers to be cherished;
nourished without blemish, dusk to dawn
infinite nothingness flourished unless perfected"
articulation is something you got going on.
great stuff!
The spoken word that Missy Sub has done does a lot to drive home every line in this poem.
It's amazing how you have grown so quick in your writing. this poem is nothing short of brilliant.
"an entrusted endeavor was hers to be cherished;
nourished without blemish, dusk to dawn
infinite nothingness flourished unless perfected"
articulation is something you got going on.
great stuff!
The spoken word that Missy Sub has done does a lot to drive home every line in this poem.
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re: Re: All Is Lost (Read By Miss_Sub)!!!
7th Jun 2012 6:04pm
"Brilliant" coming from you Eamonn, is like Albert Einstein telling Paris Hilton she is a genius.
I will take the compliment non the less.
I agree, Missy truly understands the tone of this poem and reads it perfectly.
You know I always love when you stop by.
Thank you much. :)
I will take the compliment non the less.
I agree, Missy truly understands the tone of this poem and reads it perfectly.
You know I always love when you stop by.
Thank you much. :)
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7th Jun 2012 6:18pm
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re: Re: All Is Lost (Read By Miss_Sub)!!!
Thank you so much Crim...I have to say, after her read, it is becoming a fave of mine too.
Re: All Is Lost (Read By Miss_Sub)!!!
18th Aug 2012 1:07am
Wonderful write, Rachel! I really enjoyed it, and I must say that Miss_Sub read it beautifully. She has quite a lovely voice that only added to the overall beauty of this poem.
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re: Re: All Is Lost (Read By Miss_Sub)!!!
18th Aug 2012 2:06am
Thank you Jessica. I agree, I don't think anyone could have done a better job than she did. I was so honored to find this posted.
Thank you for stopping by, it means a lot.
Thank you for stopping by, it means a lot.