deepundergroundpoetry.com
Unleash
I've forgotten the grass,
each blade poking at my soul.
That's you,
you wake me,
you've swallowed my skin,
my shelter,
I take you in.
Make me anxious,
make me long your embrace
because of this and only this
your love is grace,
you give me that grace
I lost when I fell,
without a damn trace.
Just explore my revolving chambers,
boil the cold moon,
fill in my zeros
be my hero.
I know it won't always glide
but I will attempt
to lie in your wood
and watch the sky
instead of keep my heart bordered,
paralyzed.
Unleash it all.
Drown.
Survive.
Love is far from easy.
Keep on, keep on
for you and me.
each blade poking at my soul.
That's you,
you wake me,
you've swallowed my skin,
my shelter,
I take you in.
Make me anxious,
make me long your embrace
because of this and only this
your love is grace,
you give me that grace
I lost when I fell,
without a damn trace.
Just explore my revolving chambers,
boil the cold moon,
fill in my zeros
be my hero.
I know it won't always glide
but I will attempt
to lie in your wood
and watch the sky
instead of keep my heart bordered,
paralyzed.
Unleash it all.
Drown.
Survive.
Love is far from easy.
Keep on, keep on
for you and me.
Published 11th Mar 2012
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 1
reading list entries 1
comments 4
reads 118
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
22nd Jun 2012 2:22am
27th Dec 2012 5:03pm
Beautiful, I like how it flows using various metaphors of different subjects. I like the double metaphor hidden in "fill in my zeros", the image of a zero represents a hole that needs to be filled, but also zero represents nothing, no value, where something lacking value or substance is empty and deserves to be filled.
The lines
"Drown.
Survive."
Is so mesmerizing, in a literal sense its a contradiction, if one drowned they would not survive, but in the way you used them they convey the same idea/feeling of equating drowning in someones love and therefore surviving because of being submerged in their love.
Brilliant writing, Great work!
The lines
"Drown.
Survive."
Is so mesmerizing, in a literal sense its a contradiction, if one drowned they would not survive, but in the way you used them they convey the same idea/feeling of equating drowning in someones love and therefore surviving because of being submerged in their love.
Brilliant writing, Great work!
29th Dec 2012 00:37am
29th Sep 2013 8:24pm
