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Take it Back
Take them back, those crocodile tears
I'll not hold them as collateral
for more indefinite years
nor walk tip toed in fear
of waking old demons that lurk
just beneath your crown
or of arriving to find you face down
breast deep in yesterday's dinner
Take back the good lines, the great times
and your unbelievable thighs that always
spring to mind when we stand off
like two Mexicans on a dusty street
tumble weeds rolling past our feet
neither one able to pull the trigger
Take back the promises
the oaths you swore on your mother's grave
and still went searching for other affections
dived in without the slightest reservation
pleading vanity and insanity dragged you
kicking and screaming to the point of contact
Take back all of the above, and take back the love
the unconditional, unrivaled, pure and unbridled passion
without fear of rational thoughts to get in the way
and take them far, and hide them
bury them so they never see the light of day
then please just go away
just stay away
I'll not hold them as collateral
for more indefinite years
nor walk tip toed in fear
of waking old demons that lurk
just beneath your crown
or of arriving to find you face down
breast deep in yesterday's dinner
Take back the good lines, the great times
and your unbelievable thighs that always
spring to mind when we stand off
like two Mexicans on a dusty street
tumble weeds rolling past our feet
neither one able to pull the trigger
Take back the promises
the oaths you swore on your mother's grave
and still went searching for other affections
dived in without the slightest reservation
pleading vanity and insanity dragged you
kicking and screaming to the point of contact
Take back all of the above, and take back the love
the unconditional, unrivaled, pure and unbridled passion
without fear of rational thoughts to get in the way
and take them far, and hide them
bury them so they never see the light of day
then please just go away
just stay away
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Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 11:51pm
9th Mar 2012 6:01pm
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re: Comment
9th Mar 2012 6:20pm
Jack,
always a pleasure to get your take on a write.
Glad you liked the opening metaphor, i was a little iffy about it.
Thank you for dropping by and leaving your thoughts.
always a pleasure to get your take on a write.
Glad you liked the opening metaphor, i was a little iffy about it.
Thank you for dropping by and leaving your thoughts.
re: Comment
14th Mar 2012 5:05am
Anonymous
- Edited 20th Oct 2019 11:35pm
9th Mar 2012 6:17pm
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re: take it back
9th Mar 2012 6:23pm
DD,
I guess that's as good a way as any to describe it.
thanks for the read and comment. :)
glad you liked it.
I guess that's as good a way as any to describe it.
thanks for the read and comment. :)
glad you liked it.
fine piece
9th Mar 2012 8:02pm
A mighty fine piece indeed; brimming with sentiments that we all, at one time or another, have felt.
Gypsy red
Gypsy red
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re: fine piece
9th Mar 2012 8:34pm
Gypsy,
nice to have you drop by and lay down your thoughts.
thank you kindly for your read and comment.
nice to have you drop by and lay down your thoughts.
thank you kindly for your read and comment.
comment
9th Mar 2012 8:07pm
this piece reveals a lot. the constant refusal of memories past is just wonderful.
keep it up :)
keep it up :)
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re: comment
9th Mar 2012 8:37pm
Opheliac,
yeah, I guess it does that, right enough.
thanks for the wonderful comment, and add
appreciated. :)
yeah, I guess it does that, right enough.
thanks for the wonderful comment, and add
appreciated. :)
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 11:36am
9th Mar 2012 8:51pm
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re: absolute fav
9th Mar 2012 9:05pm
Jesta,
good to see you here.
ah well yeah the thighs were to die for :)
glad you like it.
thanks lots for your words and visit.
good to see you here.
ah well yeah the thighs were to die for :)
glad you like it.
thanks lots for your words and visit.
Anonymous
- Edited 20th May 2020 11:37am
9th Mar 2012 9:45pm
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re: La
9th Mar 2012 10:07pm
LA
You are too kind, please Forgive the hammer wielding poem.
An honour to make Your list and double that for your words.
thank you lots on both çounts.
You are too kind, please Forgive the hammer wielding poem.
An honour to make Your list and double that for your words.
thank you lots on both çounts.
Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 5:37pm
9th Mar 2012 11:19pm
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re: ...
Aglitch.
honered with your adding.
ahh yes that particular simile seems to have grabbed the imagination of a few.
your read and comment is appreciated lots.
Thanks much.
honered with your adding.
ahh yes that particular simile seems to have grabbed the imagination of a few.
your read and comment is appreciated lots.
Thanks much.
Anonymous
- Edited 17th May 2018 7:36pm
10th Mar 2012 3:14am
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re: +++
10th Mar 2012 7:49am
Steve,
I didn't notice that until you said it. you are right though, it does reserve a torrent 'til the end.
Glad you liked this little number steve.
thanks for taking the time to read it and pass comment.
I didn't notice that until you said it. you are right though, it does reserve a torrent 'til the end.
Glad you liked this little number steve.
thanks for taking the time to read it and pass comment.
Anonymous
- Edited 5th Aug 2019 1:43am
10th Mar 2012 2:06pm
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re: The third verse
10th Mar 2012 3:09pm
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 7:52pm
11th Mar 2012 3:53pm
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re: Subscription Earned!
11th Mar 2012 4:15pm
mikimoondancer,
well, what a great compliment.
thank you m0st kindly for the visit and throwing down such an insightful thought.
well, what a great compliment.
thank you m0st kindly for the visit and throwing down such an insightful thought.
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 7:38pm
13th Mar 2012 6:45pm
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re: Outstanding!
13th Mar 2012 8:34pm
Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 10:09pm
16th Mar 2012 11:10pm
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heard it myself
19th Mar 2012 8:27am
Keep them all lady cause you take it . Life is funny
So much time spent on wasted words only to be repeated again and again. Very fun read for me something about
Those thighs make us do it again. I will put it to anouther test thank you sir, I liked it
So much time spent on wasted words only to be repeated again and again. Very fun read for me something about
Those thighs make us do it again. I will put it to anouther test thank you sir, I liked it
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re: heard it myself
19th Mar 2012 8:49am
well thank you for your comment, though i must confess the first sentence was a little confusing..
welcome to DU man .
welcome to DU man .
A Don Henley tune
Although this poem makes me want to put on some classic blues, it also brings to mind Don Henley's "Miss Ghost". I would like to believe the song was inspired from a love gone wrong, but that could just be my take.
Love the way you wrap this poem up. (again!)
Love the way you wrap this poem up. (again!)
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re: A Don Henley tune
27th Mar 2012 5:25pm
Mr jAZZ
i am quite partial to a bit of Howlin wolf or some John lee hooker, Screaming J and all the great Blues artists.
i must confess i have not given Don Henley much ear time outside of the eagles.
Thanks for checking out my stuff and laying down your thoughts , much appreciated.
i am quite partial to a bit of Howlin wolf or some John lee hooker, Screaming J and all the great Blues artists.
i must confess i have not given Don Henley much ear time outside of the eagles.
Thanks for checking out my stuff and laying down your thoughts , much appreciated.