My Hell

Thank you I appreciate it

I believe if you just left the first "My hell is myself." and worked around that, actually drawing it out explaining further this poem would be a lot more interesting. Because really, saying your hell is yourself and then just jotting down parts of your being gets you nowhere. You're basically saying the same thing over and over.

thanks for the suggestions; I appreciate the help
I've always thought my poems were lacking structure

You're welcome. :)

:D

only when we accept
that we bring hell upon ourselves
only then can we find the light
that will free us from all our plight....;)

Thank you for the lines, and reading it

...love the last line.

thank you