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People watching
Woman with a stroller speaking
Can see her baby girl is sleeping
Little pink boots out the bottom peeking
Scritch scratch
Bright orange pen bobbing
Lime colored note book I am holding
Feels like everything is unfolding
Scritch scratch
Looking round, strong smell of spices
Business suit and silver glasses
Dreadlocks trailing, wonder how he ties them
Scritch scratch
All these little notes I'm keeping
Find the places I keep seeking
People never seem to see me
Scritch scratch
Can see her baby girl is sleeping
Little pink boots out the bottom peeking
Scritch scratch
Bright orange pen bobbing
Lime colored note book I am holding
Feels like everything is unfolding
Scritch scratch
Looking round, strong smell of spices
Business suit and silver glasses
Dreadlocks trailing, wonder how he ties them
Scritch scratch
All these little notes I'm keeping
Find the places I keep seeking
People never seem to see me
Scritch scratch
Published 6th Mar 2012
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I like this one, you have captured what it is to watch the average passer by. Following thoughts you can't help but think, you can't help but wonder.
You are quite the observationalist but I can say that as I know you intimately, but that in itself is an undervalued skill.
Inspiration takes many forms after all.
You are quite the observationalist but I can say that as I know you intimately, but that in itself is an undervalued skill.
Inspiration takes many forms after all.
6th Mar 2012 4:37am
thank you my love I am glad you like it..people watching is always interesting especially if you have to ride the train alot
6th Mar 2012 9:22am
it's kind of amusing in an observational sort of way -- like buzzing through your head as a spectral butterfly... intersting I like the bright orange and lime green contrast, it adds some colourful imagery for sure.
6th Mar 2012 6:02pm
thank you Nameless I'm glad you liked it always amuses me that I have such stand out writers tools and still seem to go unnoticed
thanks for your comment =)
thanks for your comment =)
6th Mar 2012 8:09pm
so strange... you'd probably have better luck if you painted yourself black and white and wrote poetry from the fence side of the zebra exibit at the zoo... people are generally either trying to avoid human contact or are just too obliviously absorbed in nothing of any particular intrest... (ignorance is bliss) maybe that's just what I've noticed though...
6th Mar 2012 9:41pm
I have noticed that to but kind of part of what makes people watching interesting at times if they never see you and seem to be absorbed in there own world they dont really think about what they are doing.. you can see what alot of people are like when they think no one is watching