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Until Tomorrow
Snowflakes
and trails of breath fill the air
Frostbitten cheeks and
conversations about anything
and everything
I've never met anybody who takes
my mind off of life like you
We walk to keep the conversation moving
to keep blood and stimuli flowing
Adding to our time by
seeing things we either
both love or both hate
I love the way your eyes light up when you laugh
You move fast because you
simply want to see everything
before you have to die
I move slowly because we have
control over tonight and I want
it to last as long as it possibly can
We talk about mortality and realize
we're both afraid of the things we can't know
But you dive headlong into that darkness with a torch
and learn everything you can
I go over and over what is here
trying to glean every little detail
Hoping to find a loophole
and in digging through all this mental paperwork
I see your name signed at the bottom of every page
right next to mine
Suddenly I think
all the rest can wait until tomorrow
and I steal a kiss from the cold
and trails of breath fill the air
Frostbitten cheeks and
conversations about anything
and everything
I've never met anybody who takes
my mind off of life like you
We walk to keep the conversation moving
to keep blood and stimuli flowing
Adding to our time by
seeing things we either
both love or both hate
I love the way your eyes light up when you laugh
You move fast because you
simply want to see everything
before you have to die
I move slowly because we have
control over tonight and I want
it to last as long as it possibly can
We talk about mortality and realize
we're both afraid of the things we can't know
But you dive headlong into that darkness with a torch
and learn everything you can
I go over and over what is here
trying to glean every little detail
Hoping to find a loophole
and in digging through all this mental paperwork
I see your name signed at the bottom of every page
right next to mine
Suddenly I think
all the rest can wait until tomorrow
and I steal a kiss from the cold
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I steal a kiss from the cold
2nd Mar 2012 4:24pm
Pierre.
This is so different to your usual writing style.
you made it work well for you, still has the great story telling quality.
pretty exceptional and a great read.
This is so different to your usual writing style.
you made it work well for you, still has the great story telling quality.
pretty exceptional and a great read.
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re: I steal a kiss from the cold
2nd Mar 2012 4:30pm
Thanks, man. It's been too long. I finally decided to go back to my unfinished notebooks and try to tie up some of the loose ends. Yeah it is out of my usual style I think that's why it went unfinished for so long. Thanks again for the read. Hopefully it won't be too long before my next one.
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re: Fresh breath
13th Jun 2013 6:00am
Thank you, Michael. We are doing well and this is just a glimpse. Thank you for the read.
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re: La
3rd Mar 2012 11:39am
Hey thank you, LA. It's been a while and this is a nice, warm welcome back.
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re: Comment
3rd Mar 2012 11:38am
A Reading List add? Thank you, Jack. It's nice to know I can still write something like this. Thank you so much for the compliments as well.
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re: +++
13th Jun 2013 5:58am
Thanks a lot, Steve. It was a surprise for me as Jack has mentioned it is out of my usual style. The ending I'm especially proud of.
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re: Yes..
13th Jun 2013 6:04am
Miki, thank you for your insightful words. The innocence is something I was trying to capture at first but eluded me. I had to put it down and come back to it much later for an appropriate ending to actually come to me and when it did it was perfect. She is a wonderful inspiration.
Re:
21st Apr 2012 9:09pm
Very interesting way of interpreting it. This is quite relatable for me right as I am going through a similar situation.
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re: Re:
13th Jun 2013 6:05am
This response is long in coming so i hope your situation worked out as well as mine. Thanks for the read.
you are my warmth in the cold
9th May 2012 9:30am
Warmth in the cold, balance and equality. It drives me wild the way you write sometimes, because it is specific enough I think I know what it is about and vague enough wonder if I am mistaken in my interpretation. This is a treasure to me, and reminds me always of those happy times.
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re: you are my warmth in the cold
9th May 2012 9:52am
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re: Re: Until Tomorrow
13th Jun 2013 6:06am
I tried to move away from the usually heavy pieces i was writing and it paid off. Thank you for your read and comment
Re: Until Tomorrow
22nd Jun 2012 6:02pm
Love this poem it strikes a def chord into my heart...it reminds me very much of my relationship with my beautiful wife...thank you much Philip
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Re: Until Tomorrow
5th Dec 2012 11:29pm
very good work on the snow & ice reference, i could never use this material unless it was Narnia or Christmas lol so you brought a poem a feeling of extraordinary potential here man good job keep it coming Happy Holidays
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re: Re: Until Tomorrow
13th Jun 2013 5:57am
Thank you. It was out of my normal vein so it went unfinished for a while. It feels a little out of place but in a very good way. Thank you for your comments and time and I'm glad I could entertain you with this