Silhouettes

Wow, thank you so much milkyway. That means a lot coming from someone with talent like your own. :)

this is really sweet rachel :)

Thank you so much Paul. That means a lot! :)

This truly a work of life in innocence. Two people in love in the shadows of their shadows of GOD. To bring life for what was made out of love. KUDOS x 10 Rachel.

Jesus on a pogo stick? Haha!!! That would get someone's attention!

Your interpretation is dead on. Thank you so much for your comment A!

Very nice. If I'm being overly picky, the line "two love's conceive" should be the first line of the 4th stanza. but then you'd have to change the last word of the reconstructed stanza to keep the rhyme scheme the same. But only because it seems late to mention conception after 2 months. I know, I analyze things too much. You could make this into a Hallmark card for expecting parents, or make it a card yourself and sell it on-line, lol...  

What a nice compliment. Making it into a card. Thank you.

I considered what you said and I agree. So instead of changing the rhyming scheme, I switched the second and fourth lines. I hope this sounds better.

Thank you so much for the feed back. Always appreciated. :)

yes, that's great, I think it flows really nicely too, so nothing was lost either. I'm a genious, lololol... Actually, it was genious on your part to be able to simply move a couple lines and not take my advice to change the word. Why didn't I think of that? I bow to the superior mind!

im a parent...i dont really know what to say...fucking wow...ive never read the joy of becoming a parent in such a lyricly genious fasion...if only i could like this more then once...consider yourself followed :')

That has to be one of the best compliments received to date. I am so glad that you liked it!

Thanks for stopping by and commenting. :)

Rachel, I say it time and time again, you have an amazing gift.

It's like you been on DU forever.

Cheers to you

Thank you Kym. I am trying to learn. I only started writing since I came on DU. You are all a great inspiration. I always love seeing comments from you.
Thank you so much for your kind words. :)

This one poem was so sweet and well written I am so glad I can add this to my reading list :]

Thank you so much ChaoChao! It means a lot to me that you added that to your list.
Thank you for stopping by and commenting!

a nice read, cheered me up a little, thanks -_-

I am glad to cheer you up and that you enjoyed my poem :)
Thanks so much!

Awesome! Thank you! I am so glad that you like it. :)