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That Smile
That smile you put
On my face
Is real
And never out of place
When it comes time
For tears to fly
You put
That smile back where it belongs
You are
My number one
And my true love
Because that smile
Only comes when I'm with you
Thank you
For that smile
On my face
Is real
And never out of place
When it comes time
For tears to fly
You put
That smile back where it belongs
You are
My number one
And my true love
Because that smile
Only comes when I'm with you
Thank you
For that smile
Published 7th Jan 2012
| Edited 22nd Apr 2012
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7th Jan 2012 7:18pm
a very sweet lil message. save the punctuation for when you really want to express emotion or a pause. short phrases stacked up already tell the reader each one has it's own value. sooooooo many commas in here, that the semi-colon got lost. it takes away from the beauty of your words.
8th Jan 2012 00:03am
7th Jan 2012 7:33pm
We so forget how valuable the greatest things cost nothing, and mean the most. A smile makes people wonder what the hell are you smiling about. Great write Gothic Queen;)
