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Sinister of the Sea
why wount you speek to me???
why wount i call???
my mind is in a wounder.
and coverd by fogg..
why cant i be strong??
and stand for what i please.
only to get broken down,
and crying on my knees.
lonelyness fades me...
and i bgain to cover..
i gradually disapeare
into whats not me.
long lasting life.
lost by sea.
-Kumiko Yamamoto
why wount i call???
my mind is in a wounder.
and coverd by fogg..
why cant i be strong??
and stand for what i please.
only to get broken down,
and crying on my knees.
lonelyness fades me...
and i bgain to cover..
i gradually disapeare
into whats not me.
long lasting life.
lost by sea.
-Kumiko Yamamoto
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wow
17th Dec 2011 6:31pm
re: wow
17th Dec 2011 6:37pm
you are realy truly an inspiring person to me..and i thank you for all your suport
re: re: wow
17th Dec 2011 6:55pm
you are kind to i never be call and bodys insperation that aa new one for me and i thank you for that i never thought i be that to no-one
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re: re: re: wow
17th Dec 2011 6:59pm
Awesome
17th Dec 2011 7:46pm
re: Awesome
17th Dec 2011 8:00pm
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re: konnichiwa ^^
18th Dec 2011 00:24am
great
17th Dec 2011 8:32pm
re: great
18th Dec 2011 00:24am
Yes!
18th Dec 2011 10:38pm
The metaphor of the sea and isolation is perfect. This may be only my opinion but I would try to see if any other words might replace one or more of the "why". 3 of your first 5 sentences start with. I find that repetition should be done with care so not to lose the impact of the word.
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re: Yes!
18th Dec 2011 11:27pm