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Flowers
As if I've never developed
the ability to speak
I stutter. I stuttered,
upon seeing your pretty
face covered up with
crimson flowers.
† to my Dearest 22/2/2010
the ability to speak
I stutter. I stuttered,
upon seeing your pretty
face covered up with
crimson flowers.
† to my Dearest 22/2/2010
Published 13th Dec 2011
| Edited 14th Dec 2011
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13th Dec 2011 9:39pm
I like how you've repeated that word stutter in the third line, cause as you read it you almost wonder for a second if you've misread - it emphasises the sense of being unsure, or shaken, as if you've tripped over something.
Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 11:51pm
13th Dec 2011 10:38pm
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14th Dec 2011 10:36am
thank you both :)
your comments are appreciated.
jack: It got away. I'll correct it now.
your comments are appreciated.
jack: It got away. I'll correct it now.
15th Dec 2011 00:00am
15th Dec 2011 6:03am
and the way stutter is being used in the line it definitely gives me a wink:)
15th Dec 2011 9:31am
Black, purple and gray.
A stunned and dark feeling of loss.
I love what you make me feel with your verses.
Your short poems are greats.
A stunned and dark feeling of loss.
I love what you make me feel with your verses.
Your short poems are greats.
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 11:42pm
23rd Dec 2011 1:45pm
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23rd Dec 2011 6:31pm