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Much Better
You are in a trance
slowly going under
I'm not sure when
but you'll soon begin
to feel you are floating
Those lines
on your forehead
have all become
as faint as the distance
slipping away
They retreat into calmness
as you float
serenely
Looking down
you see the world below
It is burning
the jungles are in flames
Smoke
is rising
you taste it
tickling your nostrils
Automatically
and instinctively
you understand
what you must do
to help put out the fire
and you feel the urge
to pee . . .
A long
sweet
stream
of satisfying
pee
Ah, that's much better,
isn't it?
slowly going under
I'm not sure when
but you'll soon begin
to feel you are floating
Those lines
on your forehead
have all become
as faint as the distance
slipping away
They retreat into calmness
as you float
serenely
Looking down
you see the world below
It is burning
the jungles are in flames
Smoke
is rising
you taste it
tickling your nostrils
Automatically
and instinctively
you understand
what you must do
to help put out the fire
and you feel the urge
to pee . . .
A long
sweet
stream
of satisfying
pee
Ah, that's much better,
isn't it?
Published 22nd Dec 2009
| Edited 18th Jul 2012
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22nd Dec 2009 2:38pm
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22nd Dec 2009 3:07pm
is the feeling I get from this " a long strong stream of satisfying piss " hahahahaha yeahhhh ! haha Abra's take on saving the world , great way of putting things .
22nd Dec 2009 5:31pm
Maybe the answer would be if we all pissed together at the same time.
Thanks Paul.
Thanks Paul.
22nd Dec 2009 4:28pm
...a man - that would be a cross between Houdini and Franz Mesmer - and it will require one super human effort to extricate the planet from its current plight, Jack.
22nd Dec 2009 5:00pm
very very good imagination, you have there. geez. stunning. these are things that i think of, things my friends and I sometimes JOKE about. haha. man. nice one.
22nd Dec 2009 5:54pm
Yeah and if we don't all start pissing together the joke's gonna be on us, Celine.