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Published 12th May 2011
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14th May 2011 1:27am
Where did u get the idea to come up with this? I really like it its unorthodox and really cool!
19th May 2011 4:53am
hello!
i was just really bothered in the mind, and u know sometimes when u get so frustrated your words come out sketchy and disjointed. i guess thats how i just come up with this. thank u so much!
i was just really bothered in the mind, and u know sometimes when u get so frustrated your words come out sketchy and disjointed. i guess thats how i just come up with this. thank u so much!
18th Jun 2011 8:29am
9th Jul 2011 8:38am
for the line "i wake up screaming"
it just doesn't fit, makes the wonderful rest seem a bit conventional, like you were worried you needed some kind of movie ending. but, whatever, the composition/feeling/vibes i get from the rest is enough for me.
it just doesn't fit, makes the wonderful rest seem a bit conventional, like you were worried you needed some kind of movie ending. but, whatever, the composition/feeling/vibes i get from the rest is enough for me.
14th Jul 2011 5:20pm
ur right. looking back on it now, it kind of strayed away from what i was showing the rest of the way. but i suppose tht was rlli what i was feeling at the time, because i had been waking up screaming... thank u for pointing it out! :)