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Stranger In The Mirror
Stranger in the mirror, you’re not who I used to see-
You were once strong, but now you are weak-
Stranger in the mirror, with your empty blue eyes-
Seems so long ago your smile was real and not just a disguise-
Stranger in the mirror, the marks on your arms you try to hide-
These marks are not cuts, but they’re proof of a slow suicide-
Stranger in the mirror looking a little more familiar I see-
Stranger in the mirror your not a stranger at all, I just refuse to accept the new reflection of me-
You were once strong, but now you are weak-
Stranger in the mirror, with your empty blue eyes-
Seems so long ago your smile was real and not just a disguise-
Stranger in the mirror, the marks on your arms you try to hide-
These marks are not cuts, but they’re proof of a slow suicide-
Stranger in the mirror looking a little more familiar I see-
Stranger in the mirror your not a stranger at all, I just refuse to accept the new reflection of me-
Published 24th Apr 2011
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Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 6:01pm
24th Apr 2011 6:17am
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24th Apr 2011 6:42am
Yea I guess it coule be in "self", but I put it in the drug category because "the marks on your arms you try to hide" are tracks from slamming dope. I was just trying to use more of a suggestive approach, which definately makes it fall in the "self" category also. Thank you for the critique :]
Anonymous
- Edited 15th May 2018 9:40pm
16th May 2011 10:40pm
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24th Apr 2011 8:04am
24th Apr 2011 11:54am
25th Apr 2011 4:55am
this sort of personifies a feeling or "era" that i
have the good luck to relate to,i am guessing most
"others" who have been or are in the same situ have looked at their mirrors in the same way as the narrator.
i therefore disagree with maikeru (though not aggressively)and say this poem is where it should be.
well done!!
(and welcome btw)
have the good luck to relate to,i am guessing most
"others" who have been or are in the same situ have looked at their mirrors in the same way as the narrator.
i therefore disagree with maikeru (though not aggressively)and say this poem is where it should be.
well done!!
(and welcome btw)
25th Apr 2011 8:52am
26th Apr 2011 6:12am
The cutting open juxtaposed the stark self-reflection really nicely.
Very bittersweet.
Very bittersweet.
10th May 2011 1:37pm
12th Jun 2011 6:34am
11th Jun 2011 6:06am
Stranger in the mirror looking a little more familiar I see..
This stays really strong and powerfully emotional through the entire poem...
It was really beautiful.
I simply adored this.
This stays really strong and powerfully emotional through the entire poem...
It was really beautiful.
I simply adored this.
12th Jun 2011 6:36am
Thank you so much! It was an extremely emotional poem to write, it was a challenge for me, but a much needed one.
Thanks again!
:]
Thanks again!
:]
13th Jun 2011 11:07pm
Bold- impressionable.
Which it was, a lot. This can not only be something to relate to, but a prod for someone else to really look in the mirror and see what they have become, something that a lot of people avoid. This is the kind of poetry that even though is extremely touching, leaves you smiling, because you can see the progress the writer makes throughout the poem. (and comments!) This is really heartfelt. Good job.
Which it was, a lot. This can not only be something to relate to, but a prod for someone else to really look in the mirror and see what they have become, something that a lot of people avoid. This is the kind of poetry that even though is extremely touching, leaves you smiling, because you can see the progress the writer makes throughout the poem. (and comments!) This is really heartfelt. Good job.
17th Jun 2011 11:28am