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Handsome pie
To place trust in Him some hate
Loyalty of human put to waste
Neither do I, in supreme hands
But belief does keep us in sane lands
Some will tell you world is dark
Even crossed by Satan's mark
Wait I not for Him to intervene
But do His thoughts keep many clean
Depend I not for Him to deliver
Yet I thank a generous giver
Legs to walk, passions in quiver
Torment of tears, cold to shiver
Beauty of this enduring river.
Lose your faith when, wish to die
Think inside then, handsome pie,
A different taste in every slice
Live your virtue feed your vice.
Loyalty of human put to waste
Neither do I, in supreme hands
But belief does keep us in sane lands
Some will tell you world is dark
Even crossed by Satan's mark
Wait I not for Him to intervene
But do His thoughts keep many clean
Depend I not for Him to deliver
Yet I thank a generous giver
Legs to walk, passions in quiver
Torment of tears, cold to shiver
Beauty of this enduring river.
Lose your faith when, wish to die
Think inside then, handsome pie,
A different taste in every slice
Live your virtue feed your vice.
Published 13th Apr 2011
| Edited 24th Apr 2011
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- Edited 15th Apr 2019 9:40pm
13th Apr 2011 8:03pm
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15th Apr 2011 9:52am
Anonymous
- Edited 5th Apr 2021 9:35am
14th Apr 2011 7:13am
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Thanks for the honest opinion.."i do" is a chain for me i guess but only in this poem, i checked with my other verses they don't have it..maybe its an indication that I strongly believe in this idea..i sound and feel this way but chain it to rhyme an meter because that is what pleases and defines me..and makes me a non-conformist with so many people these days resorting to free verse..i wanted this to be an easy to remember lesson nonetheless( that is one purpose why poetry started in the first place)... Regarding its poor scripting, I would like to believe you and look for room to improve.I can't please all readers but won't give up the effort. I thank you and eagerly await more criticism from an experienced mind.