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Gave you a garden;
You neglected, forsaken;
Leaving dead flora
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forever_young
Published
23rd Aug 2014
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Chiyo
(Miss Chi)
23rd Aug 2014 4:34pm
I love this haiku! We know they're meant to tell epics within just 17 syllables. You achieved it. I've got the image perfectly. Kudos!
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forever_young
30th Aug 2014 2:49pm
Thank you! My first attempt at a haiku...took me hours! Cheers!
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Chiyo
(Miss Chi)
31st Aug 2014 2:21pm
Beware of haiku! When you're finally addicted to them your will never be able to do other forms anymore :-). My trying to get longer poems started mostly ends in cutting them down to haiku :-). It's like clipping bonsais ...
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forever_young
7th Sep 2014 10:38am
So true! I am addicted! I think a haiku is like a piece of art. In three lines the writer can script a 1000 thoughts and images.
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Solomon_Song
1st Sep 2014 8:10pm
Stunning metaphors - could visualise a flower bed with dead plants on. Not a bad first haiku!
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forever_young
7th Sep 2014 10:39am
Thanks SS!
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