STRONG HOLD

Sunlite...I read this and found it to kind of ramble a bit but I like the fact that you used this to relate to farious forms of "strong hold"...I will offer this honest critique since that is what you have requested...I would suggest that you refrain from the use of texting and symbols and capitals in your poetry because iot tends to be very disruptive to the reading eye...the eye is naturally trained to skim rather than read letters and when it sees things like 4G, Star symbols, Greek letters, use of substitutions for words like 'and' and capital letters the progress of the reading is slowed to the point where I almost stopped reading and when I get to the end I see (FT.SUN(symbol)LITE The POET)...have no idea what FT. means and the star symbol and Greek 'E's are very distracting...remember that you are competing for readers and the more pleasant and the easier the read the better changes of attracting and retaining readers...I am kind of reluacant to look at more of your work for fear of what other distractions there may be...your message was lost in the distractions...sorry... please be safe and well...thanks and take care...Jimbo

Thanks 4 valued critque  
And your opinion but if i worried  
About the negative vibe i would no longer  
Be a writer and a artist with his own expression  
Sorry you dont understand symbols all i can say step  
Your game up!
But i do have a poem 4 you
Called Kick Rocks enjoy

I liked that a lot. I c u don't pull punchs.

Thanks 4 your valued critique
I put my soul in a poem and i really. Believe
In my talent thats all :)