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I want it

His sweetness, sticky salty
sweetness...
I want it

His softness, hard as steel
softness...
I want it

His voice, deep growling
voice...
I want it

His touch, gentle rough
touch...
I want it

His night, inside me
night...
I want it

His morning, arms around me
morning...
I want it

Written by tommielynn

(Tommie Lynn)

Published 8th Aug 2014

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Re: I want it

7thMidget

8th Aug 2014 2:04pm

I feel like there is something missing and, at the same time, I appreciate the simplicity. Meanwhile, I'm just distracted by the fact that I myself don't have a deep voice. I must be missing on so much fun because of my larynx...

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tommielynn (Tommie Lynn)

8th Aug 2014 6:39pm

You don't have to have a deep voice...but it does help :)

Thank you 7thMidget. :)

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7thMidget

9th Aug 2014 4:19am

Haha! You're welcome :)

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Re: I want it

hawkdude

8th Aug 2014 2:38pm

Besides the want, miss, sounds like a need!

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tommielynn (Tommie Lynn)

8th Aug 2014 6:41pm

Need...Want...same difference...both are felt deeply.
Thank you Hawkdude :)

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8th Aug 2014 3:15pm

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tommielynn (Tommie Lynn)

8th Aug 2014 6:41pm

It sure is WM. Thanks for reading me :)

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Re: I want it

Gahddess_Worship

8th Aug 2014 11:15pm

Tommie, I love the dichotomy of adjectives in this piece, "sticky salty sweetness" (Whoa now major tingle just writing that). And the the "night" and "morning" stanzas are very romantic.

A beautifully thought-out and written piece