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unfinished
I can't stand when we are apart
Letting you go into another mans arms
Of course it hurts to see you leave
Very depressed as you can see
Even though what I said pushed you to him
You where the only thing that made me, me
Only if you knew how I feel when you left
Understand I was just a mess
Im am only just a man a human I make mistakes
I am never right but why couldn't you see
You left Because I was being "me"
This Is something I will never understand
How only 3 little word can make you weak
The words that everyone seeks
this poem is unfinished because it seems to never end
Letting you go into another mans arms
Of course it hurts to see you leave
Very depressed as you can see
Even though what I said pushed you to him
You where the only thing that made me, me
Only if you knew how I feel when you left
Understand I was just a mess
Im am only just a man a human I make mistakes
I am never right but why couldn't you see
You left Because I was being "me"
This Is something I will never understand
How only 3 little word can make you weak
The words that everyone seeks
this poem is unfinished because it seems to never end
Published 3rd Apr 2011
| Edited 4th Apr 2011
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3rd Apr 2011 4:52am
3rd Apr 2011 8:11am
For sure I know that 'ill' there just lacks a 'w'- its 'will', isnt it?. But the line "You were the only thing that mad me, me" ...was that suppose to read "you were the only thing that 'made' me, me"?
Well cant tell, never had a firm grip of the english language before.
I understand why you couldnt finish this poem...love doesnt end, does it?
Well cant tell, never had a firm grip of the english language before.
I understand why you couldnt finish this poem...love doesnt end, does it?
3rd Apr 2011 2:31pm
Your some what right the line "ill never understand" its suppose to be " I will never understand" and your right on "mad" it is 'made' but it wont let me edit anything on my phone
Yes it is unfinished because everyday we seek the two things "LOVE" and to be "LOVED" so this story will always go on thank for the read when I do get on a comeputer I will fix all of this
Yes it is unfinished because everyday we seek the two things "LOVE" and to be "LOVED" so this story will always go on thank for the read when I do get on a comeputer I will fix all of this
3rd Apr 2011 11:56pm
Wow. everyone wants someone to say i love you but when they do they run away! Why is that? I fucking love this poem!
4th Apr 2011 1:10am
I whis I could answer that question. But I've been asking the same thing for years. Thank you for like it.
4th Apr 2011 2:33am
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