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friendly fire
i couldn't tell from where i took the shot
if it was still twitching or if it was dead
i got in close to make sure of the kill
put three more shots into the heart
and drained the clip into the back of its head..
now love's dead
if it was still twitching or if it was dead
i got in close to make sure of the kill
put three more shots into the heart
and drained the clip into the back of its head..
now love's dead
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Re: friendly fire
3rd Jul 2014 11:36pm
Love is such a bitch. A sweet, crazy, hot, painful,burning bitch. Deep write Twitch. ;) XO
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7th Jul 2014 1:05am
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Re: friendly fire
4th Jul 2014 8:20am
I like the ferocity of your finale... well penned even though the subject matter is forlorn xx
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7th Jul 2014 1:06am
I think "forlorn" is a great word for it. Always appreciated Miss Heart. Thank you. xo
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re: Re: friendly fire
7th Jul 2014 1:07am
Wo! Thank you Mia. Great reaction. Stoked it got you Miss M. You are appreciated. Thank you. :)
Re: friendly fire
4th Jul 2014 1:43pm
Yup, it deserves to be murdered in such fashion too!
Powerful, painful real ink...
Powerful, painful real ink...
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7th Jul 2014 1:08am
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4th Jul 2014 5:17pm
re: Re: friendly fire
7th Jul 2014 1:10am
Don't worry brother. Loves like a cockroach, when everything dies it just bloody gets back up and keeps breeding. All power Mr Hash. :)
Re: friendly fire
17th Jul 2014 11:07pm
It's hard to kill and very messy as well. It never goes as planned. Good write.
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