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Poetry
You know,
I tried
to throw
away
my tired
words and couldn’t.
Shouldn’t
we be able
to write
without
pondering
what’s right —
the next phrase?
Let me just raze
this page
and begin
anew;
No battling my rage
at having no clue
how to create
a poem that’s great,
without
sounding inane
and having to strain
to rhyme this word or that
harmonize a chord or pat
some ill-sounding phrase
into place in this line
or the next.
Oh, I feel hexed
or am I just crazed?
How did the old poets
like Dickinson and Poe
accomplish this
AND
get praised
for what can only be,
for me,
woe
to know
how low
I sink
to summon
energy
for this
feat
in ink
of what
they’ve done
that
I wish
to repeat?
I tried
to throw
away
my tired
words and couldn’t.
Shouldn’t
we be able
to write
without
pondering
what’s right —
the next phrase?
Let me just raze
this page
and begin
anew;
No battling my rage
at having no clue
how to create
a poem that’s great,
without
sounding inane
and having to strain
to rhyme this word or that
harmonize a chord or pat
some ill-sounding phrase
into place in this line
or the next.
Oh, I feel hexed
or am I just crazed?
How did the old poets
like Dickinson and Poe
accomplish this
AND
get praised
for what can only be,
for me,
woe
to know
how low
I sink
to summon
energy
for this
feat
in ink
of what
they’ve done
that
I wish
to repeat?
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Re: Poetry
2nd Jul 2014 7:07pm
your poem flows along gently like a brook. we follow humbly in the footsteps of the great poets...
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re: Re: Poetry
2nd Jul 2014 11:02pm
Thank you, JohnFeddeler. We do, humbly and gingerly, tread in their luminous paths.
Re: Poetry
3rd Jul 2014 4:00am
Your journey into your mind to create brilliance
Was not only good it was outstanding! Brava! :)
Was not only good it was outstanding! Brava! :)
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re: Re: Poetry
Thank you, Poetikmind, for lavishing me with such praise. :-* I've quite a tall order to live up to now. :-p
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re: Re: Poetry
13th Jul 2014 9:35pm
Thank you, Jack, luv! :-*
I was - am surprised in so very many ways by your comment. After adding voice to this poem, I thought I'd look at some others and just happened on this. I hadn't thought anyone would have heard it yet, but you did.
Now that I've said that, I'm rather at a loss for words. I can but say what I feel: I am deeply touched by your words. :-*
I was - am surprised in so very many ways by your comment. After adding voice to this poem, I thought I'd look at some others and just happened on this. I hadn't thought anyone would have heard it yet, but you did.
Now that I've said that, I'm rather at a loss for words. I can but say what I feel: I am deeply touched by your words. :-*
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re: Re: Poetry
14th Jul 2014 00:22am
That is quite an interesting statement, PoetSpeak, luv. :-* Actually, depending upon how it's used, rhyme can be one of the most challenging methodologies to use skillfully.
I look at some of the poets from long ago who were adept at it and beyond clever in awe. In my opinion, while it can be the recourse of laziness, it can also be an incredibly majestic form as well.
Thank you for stopping by and giving my mind something to think of other than how tired I am of the vagaries of recording... :-*
I look at some of the poets from long ago who were adept at it and beyond clever in awe. In my opinion, while it can be the recourse of laziness, it can also be an incredibly majestic form as well.
Thank you for stopping by and giving my mind something to think of other than how tired I am of the vagaries of recording... :-*
Re: Poetry
Anonymous
14th Jul 2014 1:25am
I love the rhyming schematics of this ink! So potent is this message!
Enjoyed this Savaja! Xo
Enjoyed this Savaja! Xo
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re: Re: Poetry
14th Jul 2014 3:09am
Thank you, RainC(rain1courtel), luv ~ :-*
It was rather fun to do and of all of the poems on the site, it and Heating Water are older. The rest have all been written of late.
Poetry, if I recall correctly, was an assignment once upon a time to create a poem rhyming in the style of a great old master. It was not an easy task...
It was rather fun to do and of all of the poems on the site, it and Heating Water are older. The rest have all been written of late.
Poetry, if I recall correctly, was an assignment once upon a time to create a poem rhyming in the style of a great old master. It was not an easy task...
Re: Poetry
14th Jul 2014 1:45am
Splendid. Unique. Flowing. Smooth. You've won the struggle of finding words that belong on a page. Also, wonderful voice, adds so much to the prose. I look forward to more...
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re: Re: Poetry
14th Jul 2014 3:11am
Re: Poetry
1st Sep 2014 3:02am
You have an amazing, unique style as did Dickens and Poe.Speak with the voice you know and love.
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re: Re: Poetry
1st Sep 2014 3:28am
Oh, Gahddess_Worship, luv :-* ~
You are so incredibly sweet and kind to me, luv. :-*
Thank you. I will, though I think you give me too much credit. :-*
You are so incredibly sweet and kind to me, luv. :-*
Thank you. I will, though I think you give me too much credit. :-*