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the weight
stale eyelids at half-mast
concealing carmine cracked sclera
palm pedestal, chin rests
gaunt fingers cradle hook jaw
against the grain
of five-o-clock shadow
the weight of his world
on toothache display
for the 'Beyond Mouth and Mind competition'
Poetry of the body: Forget what the mouth says, and the thoughts marshalled into words. This is about non-verbal communication. Talk with the body.http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/6966/
concealing carmine cracked sclera
palm pedestal, chin rests
gaunt fingers cradle hook jaw
against the grain
of five-o-clock shadow
the weight of his world
on toothache display
for the 'Beyond Mouth and Mind competition'
Poetry of the body: Forget what the mouth says, and the thoughts marshalled into words. This is about non-verbal communication. Talk with the body.http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/6966/
Published 17th Jun 2014
| Edited 19th Jun 2014
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17th Jun 2014 10:50pm
a picture of misery,
words hammering
home the aching
head in hand
dejection of it all...
words hammering
home the aching
head in hand
dejection of it all...
17th Jun 2014 11:09pm
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14th Jul 2014 10:13am
Anonymous
18th Jun 2014 4:19am
Love this Fenom! Stunning work! :) Good luck hon....Xo
18th Jun 2014 4:30am
hehehe. I digged this write!
The way you showed us with little words the situation.
Darker
The way you showed us with little words the situation.
Darker
20th Jun 2014 8:07am
thanks a lot for your insight, and kind words... I appreciate that...=)
28th Jun 2014 6:41am
I've read many of your poems, and then I realized that you like Bruce Lee, and with that perhaps comes your understanding of a great philosophy. I’m sure you have much to do with it though. But I just wanted to comment on this one because of the awesome last line. Imagine the cause of anything. Carl Sagan writes: “it begins with the origin of the universe and ends with the cure for a toothache.” And then there was a long incantation against toothaches, and it’s treatment; second grade beer. I just always dissolved an aspirin on it. Anyway, great poems and philosophy that makes sense to me.
Well thank you so much for your kind, passionate, intelligent words Pishashee.
And also for reading a lot of my poems =)
And also for reading a lot of my poems =)
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4th Jul 2014 4:19pm
Anonymous
- Edited 15th Apr 2019 9:40pm
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7th Jul 2014 11:07pm
14th Jul 2014 10:10am
I don't see misery-- I see inquisitive contemplation:)
I love this poem as usual, I love most of your work.
I love this poem as usual, I love most of your work.
14th Jul 2014 10:12am
14th Jul 2014 11:59am
Whatever you see is ok with me...=)
thanks for the visit and kind words Lilly...
thanks for the visit and kind words Lilly...
16th Jul 2014 7:36pm
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21st Jul 2014 10:00pm
i have a frnd with ur like name
exquisite is he
and i came to say
I LOVE UR WATER THEORY
HOW TRUE TIS
like sands through hands spills
water can be kept cupped still
great thrill
ur thoughts capture still!
exquisite is he
and i came to say
I LOVE UR WATER THEORY
HOW TRUE TIS
like sands through hands spills
water can be kept cupped still
great thrill
ur thoughts capture still!
21st Jul 2014 11:57pm