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Chaos of a Disconnect
You look at me and I g e t l o s t
You look lost
You stand before me in lust
I lay down below you in love
I talk too much I......
l o n g for you to listen
Instead I hear a DEAFENING silence You s t u t t e r a staccato s i g h
We volunteer play pretend prisoners...... s e e k i n g
To navigate stay captivated…… UNTIL
Escaping through a [hidden] trap door
Freedom forfeits reason and the ransom that was you and me
‘he’ stands before ‘she’
Misunderstanding “me”
She lies she forgets The truth he remembers
The news about us
Rewinds as we watch….
You preview a forecast.. de je vous….
Pause.. my predictions - press replay
I will not harden my heart - sow the seeds to soften your soul
You rescue me - I save you
The danger in you deploys the safety in me
I look to you - you look to me
And then finally you see…………………………
.
you finally see......
You look lost
You stand before me in lust
I lay down below you in love
I talk too much I......
l o n g for you to listen
Instead I hear a DEAFENING silence You s t u t t e r a staccato s i g h
We volunteer play pretend prisoners...... s e e k i n g
To navigate stay captivated…… UNTIL
Escaping through a [hidden] trap door
Freedom forfeits reason and the ransom that was you and me
‘he’ stands before ‘she’
Misunderstanding “me”
She lies she forgets The truth he remembers
The news about us
Rewinds as we watch….
You preview a forecast.. de je vous….
Pause.. my predictions - press replay
I will not harden my heart - sow the seeds to soften your soul
You rescue me - I save you
The danger in you deploys the safety in me
I look to you - you look to me
And then finally you see…………………………
.
you finally see......
Published 16th Jun 2014
| Edited 21st Jun 2014
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Anonymous
- Edited 14th May 2018 10:03pm
17th Jun 2014 3:46pm
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21st Jun 2014 7:04pm
tks so much, the original format was difficult to replicate on this site..curtsy bow..
Anonymous
18th Jun 2014 3:10am
Love the poem Feen and the title was perfect for your ink and it's structure. Very creative! Little hard for me to read though, kinda 'chaotic'<-- pun intended ;)
21st Jun 2014 7:09pm
Anonymous
- Edited 16th May 2018 10:09pm
21st Jun 2014 5:12am
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21st Jun 2014 7:12pm
illustrating how words float in my mind..disjointed, confusing and .......I'll ask them to stand still soon..tks always curtsy bow blush........
29th Jun 2014 9:39pm
I see what you're saying: the savage, uncivilized beast of a poem as it begins life in our head, before we wrestle it into submission. I like the primal look...
