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Drink
Watch me
as I unzip your mind
lick your thoughts
and taste your senses
Your eyes swallow my vulnerability
Written for the 'Eye Candy' (women's comp) competition hosted by DevlinDLC
as I unzip your mind
lick your thoughts
and taste your senses
Your eyes swallow my vulnerability
Written for the 'Eye Candy' (women's comp) competition hosted by DevlinDLC
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13th Jun 2014 5:06pm
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16th Jun 2014 3:19pm
Thank you so much for the read and comment Ronnie2013!
lol....the audience won't be disappointed ; )
lol....the audience won't be disappointed ; )
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13th Jun 2014 5:23pm
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16th Jun 2014 3:21pm
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13th Jun 2014 5:40pm
visionary ...
erotic
gives all signs of pleasure
no vulgarity
equals all measures
measure for measure
ecstatic orgasmic
of mind body and sole
and as if each one is fishing
in the ordained hole
twas the feeling
that begets me
reading ur poetry
which tantamounts to cumming
lady
this is a seasoned comment
also posted as my erotica
to help guys and gals
achieve their desired end
the bat and balls clanging the valleys and as it rains they sigh!
aaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhh!
good they came...
erotic
gives all signs of pleasure
no vulgarity
equals all measures
measure for measure
ecstatic orgasmic
of mind body and sole
and as if each one is fishing
in the ordained hole
twas the feeling
that begets me
reading ur poetry
which tantamounts to cumming
lady
this is a seasoned comment
also posted as my erotica
to help guys and gals
achieve their desired end
the bat and balls clanging the valleys and as it rains they sigh!
aaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhh!
good they came...
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16th Jun 2014 3:24pm
Thank you Again for the incredible compliment!
It always feels good to achieve a desired end.
It always feels good to achieve a desired end.
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Anonymous
13th Jun 2014 8:07pm
I really love this one, Lena! It reads like a winner.. ;) Xo
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16th Jun 2014 3:27pm
Oh Rain, I am truly humbled and honored by your words.....Your work is hard to beat ; )
Thank you greatly mi amor...xo
Thank you greatly mi amor...xo
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14th Jun 2014 1:04am
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16th Jun 2014 3:30pm
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14th Jun 2014 1:37am
Exquisite, air-tight, nothing extraneous, nothing but the moment encapsulated in sheer artistry.
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16th Jun 2014 3:31pm
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14th Jun 2014 9:57am
Ms Lena, this is a concise, compelling, complete asssault on the senses.
I applaud you!
I applaud you!
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16th Jun 2014 3:37pm
As I curtsy to your gracious comment....I want to also mention how proud I feel that it assaulted the senses...lol!
Thank you VP sir ; )
Thank you VP sir ; )
re: Re: Drink
16th Jun 2014 3:39pm
That's right Mr. Hashman....drink up...lol!
It's great to see you
Thank you!
It's great to see you
Thank you!
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16th Jun 2014 3:41pm
There you are Mr. Hawk
I definitely appreciate your comment because you write some awesome pieces ; )
Thank you!
I definitely appreciate your comment because you write some awesome pieces ; )
Thank you!
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30th Jun 2014 6:12pm
Beautiful piece Ms. LENA!!
Great luck in the comp..!
Awesome read sweets!!
Sir Lancelott
Great luck in the comp..!
Awesome read sweets!!
Sir Lancelott
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30th Jun 2014 6:41pm
Wow! Thank you Mr. Lance
The competition finished and this poem was a runner-up to Ms. Rain's poem (which is an incredible honor).
I'm pleased you enjoyed it and appreciate your read and comment!
The competition finished and this poem was a runner-up to Ms. Rain's poem (which is an incredible honor).
I'm pleased you enjoyed it and appreciate your read and comment!
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12th Jul 2014 6:59pm
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12th Jul 2014 10:36pm
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28th Jul 2014 9:05pm
I'm not very much into erotic poetry though this really caught my attention. Good write.
Now it's time to take care of business, if ya know what I mean.
Now it's time to take care of business, if ya know what I mean.
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29th Jul 2014 12:37pm
The fact that you took the time to read and comment is an honor sir.
I like your comment about getting down to business....cause I definitely don't play games.
Thank you
I like your comment about getting down to business....cause I definitely don't play games.
Thank you