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The Unforgettable Time
You ever wait for the phone to ring
that one call that your dreading to take on
Well in this time, that phone call came
Silence filled the room
life was at a stand still
Your left in disbelief
emotions running high
birds flying high in the clouds without a care in the world
you glance out and look above
wondering why
how can this happen again
Every curse comes to mind
the tears swell up but can not escape
your all dried up
the tormenting pain inside
so about to explode to oblivion
You go into shock
denial forces surrounds you
A life always taken some how
Is it really her time
She resides in room 404
here life is undecided
my life is left on hold
that one call that your dreading to take on
Well in this time, that phone call came
Silence filled the room
life was at a stand still
Your left in disbelief
emotions running high
birds flying high in the clouds without a care in the world
you glance out and look above
wondering why
how can this happen again
Every curse comes to mind
the tears swell up but can not escape
your all dried up
the tormenting pain inside
so about to explode to oblivion
You go into shock
denial forces surrounds you
A life always taken some how
Is it really her time
She resides in room 404
here life is undecided
my life is left on hold
Published 11th Jun 2014
| Edited 13th Jun 2014
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Anonymous
11th Jun 2014 4:40am
I love the melancholy of this ink, cak! Very soft and lovely.
slight suggestion : It might sound better if you leave off the word 'out' in the third stanza, second line. Xo
slight suggestion : It might sound better if you leave off the word 'out' in the third stanza, second line. Xo
11th Jun 2014 4:43am
Thank you so much Rain, its a pleasure to hear from you and your suggestion is very well taken.....~Jess
11th Jun 2014 5:24pm
Its a pleasure to see you stopping by coolman, thank you glad u liked:)
12th Jun 2014 8:51pm
Thank You Broom, but you are correct I meant forces, not force....You notice more when you reread your work. It makes more sense when its forces instead :)